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Oct 03, 2011 16:21

Title: A Delicate Art
Author: desfinado
Pairing: Frank/Gerard/Mikey/Ray
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: (indirect) incest, voyeurism
Word count: 7055
Disclaimer: They don't belong to me; not making a profit.
Summary: Frank's band knows all about revenge plots.
Notes: Set roughly during the summer of 2003. Written for the amazing 2011 moldypitsandall challenge. Thank you so much ( Read more... )

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Comments 79

synonomy October 3 2011, 23:54:48 UTC

I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS OMG *_______*

He hopes they can't see his dick in it; objects may seem smaller than they appear, and all that shit.

AHAHAHAHA ILU

desfinado October 7 2011, 05:46:20 UTC

I am SO glad you did! Suuuuuuuuure, Frank, it's the mirror. LOL.

Thanks for the lovely comment ♥

brynnmck October 4 2011, 00:05:32 UTC

Okay so I know we kind of just met and all, so I hope it does not come across as creepy when I say:

I. FUCKING. LOVE. YOU.

NO SERIOUSLY. I am incoherent with how much I love every damn thing about this. I love how NORMAL and yet how REALLY UNIQUELY HOT the whole thing is, and getting sort of dragged into the moment just like they all do. It's like living in this totally believable alternate universe when you sometimes accidentally have sex with all your friends, and it's awesome. I love how DISTINCT they all are in their responses, and also IMMENSELY DORKY and also INCREDIBLY HOT, and just. The fact that they keep CRACKING UP LAUGHING and then are like NO, LET'S DO THIS, WE'RE ON A MISSION, oh my god, it's so fucking fantastic. I could honestly quote this whole thing back to you as my favorite part, but this especially:

"I do hate the Yankees," Ray says. RAY TORO GET IN MY PANTS. (I have no idea whether Ray--like Frank, that vile betrayer--is a Yankees fan, but I am taking this as canon until proven otherwise ( ... )

desfinado October 7 2011, 05:49:01 UTC

Ahhhhhhhhhh I THINK WE MUST HAVE MET ON SOME OTHER ASTRAL PLANE because I fucking love YOU and YOUR WRITING HOLY SHIT so thank you thank you THANK YOU for such spectacular feedback!

It is kind of a mindfuck to be told my suspend-all-disbelief almost-GSF feelings "normal" and "believable" and it is SUCH A COMPLIMENT. Thank you! I definitely feel like there would be a lot of cracking up and being dorky because: it's who they are, right?

HE CAN GET IN YOUR PANTS AFTER HE GETS IN MINE. Also it was totally shiningartifact's idea to have him hate the Yankees, so she should get credit for that!

Thanks for reading and commenting, girl! ♥

brynnmck October 7 2011, 23:06:48 UTC

ASTRAL PLANE. YES. I AM TOTALLY INTO THIS THEORY. <33333 (And thank yoooou! *beams*)

It's crazy to me to read in the other comments that you're nervous writing dialogue and humor, because dude, you are AWESOME at it. Honestly, after I read this I had one of those "why am I writing, again?" moments, because writing is hard and your style just feels so effortless and has such a BRILLIANT combination of humor and heat, and the details you choose are so perfect and expressive and REAL (which is why I think this feels believable to me even though it's an unlikely scenario--like, I have never accidentally had sex with all my friends but I DEFINITELY know what fake cheddar breath smells like, you know?). Honestly, you have such a gift for dialogue--whether it's banter or dirty talking or whatever--that I'm shocked to see you're not comfortable with it. It's just all EXACTLY what I want to read and it just makes me really really REALLY happy. ♥

desfinado October 8 2011, 22:35:16 UTC

Oh dude <3333333333 THANK YOU. You are SPOILING ME with all these lovely words! I just... my fic has all been flowery descriptions and visuals, in the past, and I've been slowly learning how to be more CONCISE, while still painting vivid pictures, and having to confront dialogue O__________O I think I read so much fic by people whose dialogue is ALWAYS endlessly funny and spot-on, all the theopteryx and bexless and brooklinegirls of the world that I worry I can't ever touch that... but I want to LEARN how to, you know? So now I watch and listen to a lot of footage of these dudes laughing and interacting with each other before and while I write, to try and get in that space. BLAH BLAH BLAH sorry I wrote you a small essay there - basically, it is something that I've been experimenting more with this year and I love what a supportive environment we have here for challenging ourselves and our writing! Thank you for being such a big part of that support ( ... )

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romanticalgirl October 4 2011, 00:09:06 UTC

Baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaand of dooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorks. &them; &you;

desfinado October 7 2011, 05:51:56 UTC

Right? I just want to make them be dorky while doing EVERYTHING. Up to and including circle jerks. &YOU; Thanks! :D

greedy_dancer October 4 2011, 00:13:25 UTC

Haahahahaha, that was great! Love the set-up, and how it doesn't feel forced at all. An offer they couldn't refuse! *g*

(Also, HOT and DIRTY! \o/)

desfinado October 7 2011, 05:52:47 UTC

Thank you! EXACTLY. LOL. We can blame The Godfather on all of this mess :D

So glad you liked it, thanks for the comment ♥

anoneknewmoose October 4 2011, 00:18:03 UTC

Ray is leaning in the doorframe with his arms braced above him

UNFFFFFFFFFF and from then on out all I got out of this is Ray Toro is hung, hot, and hot to trot. And Frank wants to bone him.

desfinado October 7 2011, 05:54:00 UTC

HUNG, HOT, HOT TO TROT. Seriously, I tried to make Frank pay attention to the other guys more but he was JUST SO INTO RAY. I couldn't blame him. *_________________*

Thanks again for your incredible beta help (and AWESOME comments throughout) and for helping me see the joy that is Toro. ♥ So glad you liked it!