PPC Mission 3: The Ring of Artemis.

[dawnbluewings]

Title: THE RING OF ARTEMIS
Author: Brown Eyed Girl17
Rating: M
Obligatory linkage: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2536173/1/The_Ring_of_Artemis
Mission by: dawnbluewings, as Agent Rose/Ross
Notes: This story was the only Tamora Pierce/Lord of the Rings crossover on the Pit. I

Comments

[lady_rilwen]

You misspelled Masbolle as Mesbolle in one sentence, and you repeatedly replaced Mindelan with Mindalen. Please fix these things. ;)
Other than that, good.

[dawnbluewings]

Whoops... Fixed now. Thanks for the heads-up! :D

Note to self: In future, proofread four times, with a copy of the book in hand... Particularly when your Beta is as tired as you are.

[lady_rilwen]

Also, your 'the prospect was worrying' etc, 'the' should have been capitalised. ;)

[lady_rilwen]

Oh, and one more. Chisakami does not have a stupid name. What she does have, is a stolen canon name. Princess Chisakami was the Yamani Princess that Prince Roald was to marry, but she died in the earthquake, and therefore they sent Shinkokami instead. You may want to amend your charge-list.

*is armed with very good memory for written things, and copies of the books*

[dawnbluewings]

Well... poop. I knew it sounded familiar, I just forgot where it was from. Thanks! =D Charge list changed...

[lady_rilwen]

Me again! Bet you're getting sick of me, huh? :p
You now have doubled commas where you change the charge list. There should probably have been a mini-Stormwing, too. Because the writer misspelled Carthak as Cathrak.

*nitpicky Sith is nitpicky*

[dawnbluewings]

Actually, I'm not getting sick of you... However, at this point, I think I should just add you as Beta for this one =P Or something.

There is now the apropriate number of commas, and a little steely Mini as well.

And changed a few things that were annoying me about the whole thing. Hopefully this will be the last time I have to edit this damn thing...