Comments | david_squared: GRAVITY -- PG

fieryrogue in david_squared

GRAVITY -- PG

Feb 18, 2009 13:51

Not only popular demand, but overwhelming demand, brought this to you. You guys are sooo sweet! And I sincerely apologize for the mass heart breakage that occurred. It was an accident, I swear! <3 <3 <3 Clean up crews are on the way...

[title] Gravity [2/?]
[author] fieryrogue
[pairing] Cookleta
[rating] PG
[word count] 672
[summary] It's hard ( Read more... )

challenge #4

Comments 12

clionona February 18 2009, 22:42:03 UTC

My god, do you have a way with words...
Just... GUH!

This passage in particular killed me:

He described to you how the moon affects the waves, how the planets align, and all about Newton's Third Law of Motion. "Whenever a particle A exerts a force on another particle B, B simultaneously exerts a force on A with the same magnitude in the opposite direction." Yeah, you memorized it. You memorized it because right then in that moment it sounded like poetry. Like he was A and you were B.

Beautiful and perfect in every single way. ♥!!!

This is breaking my heart, but in such a good way.

Well done, you! *stands and applauds*

fieryrogue February 19 2009, 05:25:35 UTC

We angsters love a breaking heart, for some reason. And we gotta break down the heart to build it back up, right? Right.

Now, you won't think of science in the same way again, will you?

*Clio is watching The Science Channel, where they are explaining some sort of chemical/physics/aerodynamics topic* "Aww, that's so precious!" she says, clutching her heart.

Now, how long do I hold you all in antici--pation before I clear up this bloody mess?...

rajkumari905 February 19 2009, 06:00:34 UTC

Oh noeeeeeeeees! Aaaaaaaaarchie! *huggles him* I loved the way you brought back Moonlight Sonata and I loved Archie reflecting about the things he'd learned.
Fix it? :)

fieryrogue February 19 2009, 07:16:39 UTC

*hug* Never fear, my bb, never fear. All hearts shall be sewn up soon enough. Hang in there!

(thanks for the comments by the way! :))

kal_ella February 19 2009, 07:29:51 UTC

*blows snot into tissue* so angsty. `=*( will you make it all better, will you? *shakes you*

fieryrogue February 19 2009, 08:43:03 UTC

Ack! Okay, okay! No need for violence! ;) I'll have a talk with the boys and see what I can do, okay?

lc_writings February 19 2009, 07:56:51 UTC

I want to get them both together and hit them. Hard. With something that will hurt them. Or maybe smack their foreheads together. How can't they see they're dying without each other? How can Archie be so blind not to see that Dave was just playing a role? How can Dave be so stupid not to see how his actions affected Archie and to tell him he wasn't surprised Archie was immature? (Oh, erm, I should have warned... Archie = Archie, lol, and Dave = Cook, for further reference ( ... )

fieryrogue February 19 2009, 09:14:51 UTC

Oh, I'm so glad Archie's dualism worked out. I have to say it was incredibly difficult for me to write this part because I kept thinking, "Does this make sense? What's going on here?" I was afraid it was a little contrived. As I'm sure you've experienced, if you're kind of making up each bit as you go along, it can be difficult. At some point I just thought, "Okay, that's it, I'm walking away," because I didn't want to take ten years on it. But you're so right about real people being contradictory (and petty, I could probably add here), and yeah, it kind of makes you feel alive, doesn't it? Even if it's anguishing. At least you're feeling something ( ... )

lc_writings February 19 2009, 09:30:25 UTC

It was perfect the way you wrote. And I do know about writing something and not being sure about whether it's working or not... I find it scary but exciting.

Yes! *waits for you to bring the boys* We'll teach them they cannot mess around with our hearts!

I've been good. I've behaved. I've even written fluff! What else can I do?

fieryrogue February 19 2009, 09:46:32 UTC

And I've already learned that that... is the greatest sacrifice of all. If that doesn't get them in line, I don't know what will.

churchslackzluv February 20 2009, 16:26:50 UTC

-flail- OHMIGOSH.

I absolutely adore how you connected this to the first part! OUR POOR BOYS D:

Are you gonna make it better? Hm? ARE YA? WAIT THERE'S ANOTHER PART.

-runs off to read-

fieryrogue February 20 2009, 16:51:41 UTC

You are probably finding out the answer to that question right about... now. I will wait patiently to see what you think.

Man, I really love it when people FLAIL. I don't know if it's just because I like that word, or what. :D

FLAIL FLAIL FLAIL. Hee!