Oh my gooooood~~!
I finished Searching! I finished Searching~~!!
Some six months of work and clocking out at practically 96 thousand words.
Now I need to make the rather huge 'Making of Searching/What Searching Could Have Been' post. And that will be huge. And most probably take me some time to write.
But first, I'll write down all the things that I want to remember to include/change for the edits. :3
This bit will probably get longer and longer later on as I remember stuff/re-read Searching again. XDD;;
Make it more obvious that Marland has leathery wings.
Make it more obvious that Marland is green with gold swirls.
Get rid of the heightened smell references.
Take out the bit about Marland having boxers.
Get rid of the references to 'hell'.
Marland asking Shodin why he hadn't tried to escape.
Lower Marland's sensitivity to light.
Drop the name of the city somewhere earlier. And make a better name for it.
Make an earlier note of Marland wondering if human tasted as weird to them as his medicine does to him.
Marland actually is in danger of being attacked with a weapon (more possibly a gun) if he's seen by a human, rather than just the human running away screaming.
Marland's blood is red. (Which, maybe, most of the xeni should be as well, if they're able to take and use oxygen?)
Know how the heck Marland's magic works.
I have got to do something about all the 'looks', 'glances', and 'turned'. There's too many of them!
Possibly rename Hela (name of a god. Whoops. *facepalm*) Know what the heck she looks like.
Get rid of Gahn.
Know how the heck the collars work.
Get rid of Marland being nostalgic for his homeworld.
Have Marland start to pair using his magic with pain.
Hope I can describe Kendal's van better. -_____-
Marland doesn't keep the first set of cardkeys (they get taken off him/he drops them when he gets shot)
Explain why Pai was at Kendal's house.
Explain wtf happened to Pai when they were at Kendal's house. (Or, at least, have Marland think about where she disappeared to)
Make the shackles more obvious (I was forgetting they were there! Yeah, Laris gave Kendal a key.)
Marland's ears stopped being obvious later on. XDD;;
Extra scenes likely to be written
Marland and Kendal's first meeting.
Kids staying up to see if Marland's a xeno (set before or after Searching. Not sure.)
Kendal's team eavesdropping on Marland and Shodin's conversation and wtfing before they meet.
Laris and Nav's thoughts about Marland and Shodin.
Kendal's group at the fast food place (part 22)
Possibly have Marland and Shodin wonder if Puzz was the reason behind Shodin's memory.
Kendal's team at the shops, buying Marland's chocolate.
Post-series, Shodin asks Marland about the questions he answered (Extra: Questions)
SURPRISE. :D
Kendal and Laris realise they know a person in common.
Fion wakes Marland during the day again.
Extra scenes not likely to be written
Thoughts from the landlord.
Marland and Wendil (his mum)
Marland first meeting everyone.
Fion's thoughts before and after the mind-wipe. (Yes, it was because of Fion that Ronthar lost his memories, and that's why he got them back when they reconnected. :3)
And now another mini list, for the new stuff that I can find a little easier:
Should Shodin stumble over xeno/xeni?
Not sure if I can take out the 'hell' references since that's being used as a general swear rather than 'the place where people who have sinned' go. And if I used something else to replace hell, it'd be really obvious and out of place. =/ Unless I replaced it with 'fuck', but then it'd just be overused.
Hm. How does Marland's scales grow back? Is his shoulder going to be the least unprotected part of him (apart from his wings) for a while?
Need to check up what colour and shape Shodin's drugs should be at the end.
Maybe have Marland and Shodin start wondering if Puzz had been the cause of Shodin's memory loss after they met Balt.
I need to add more sense descriptions. And descriptions in general.
Make sure Balt doesn't keep eye contact when they first meet.
Some six months of work and clocking out at practically 96 thousand words.
Now I need to make the rather huge 'Making of Searching/What Searching Could Have Been' post. And that will be huge. And most probably take me some time to write.
But first, I'll write down all the things that I want to remember to include/change for the edits. :3
This bit will probably get longer and longer later on as I remember stuff/re-read Searching again. XDD;;
Make it more obvious that Marland has leathery wings.
Make it more obvious that Marland is green with gold swirls.
Get rid of the heightened smell references.
Take out the bit about Marland having boxers.
Get rid of the references to 'hell'.
Marland asking Shodin why he hadn't tried to escape.
Lower Marland's sensitivity to light.
Drop the name of the city somewhere earlier. And make a better name for it.
Make an earlier note of Marland wondering if human tasted as weird to them as his medicine does to him.
Marland actually is in danger of being attacked with a weapon (more possibly a gun) if he's seen by a human, rather than just the human running away screaming.
Marland's blood is red. (Which, maybe, most of the xeni should be as well, if they're able to take and use oxygen?)
Know how the heck Marland's magic works.
I have got to do something about all the 'looks', 'glances', and 'turned'. There's too many of them!
Possibly rename Hela (name of a god. Whoops. *facepalm*) Know what the heck she looks like.
Get rid of Gahn.
Know how the heck the collars work.
Get rid of Marland being nostalgic for his homeworld.
Have Marland start to pair using his magic with pain.
Hope I can describe Kendal's van better. -_____-
Marland doesn't keep the first set of cardkeys (they get taken off him/he drops them when he gets shot)
Explain why Pai was at Kendal's house.
Explain wtf happened to Pai when they were at Kendal's house. (Or, at least, have Marland think about where she disappeared to)
Make the shackles more obvious (I was forgetting they were there! Yeah, Laris gave Kendal a key.)
Marland's ears stopped being obvious later on. XDD;;
Extra scenes likely to be written
Marland and Kendal's first meeting.
Kids staying up to see if Marland's a xeno (set before or after Searching. Not sure.)
Kendal's team eavesdropping on Marland and Shodin's conversation and wtfing before they meet.
Laris and Nav's thoughts about Marland and Shodin.
Kendal's group at the fast food place (part 22)
Possibly have Marland and Shodin wonder if Puzz was the reason behind Shodin's memory.
Kendal's team at the shops, buying Marland's chocolate.
Post-series, Shodin asks Marland about the questions he answered (Extra: Questions)
SURPRISE. :D
Kendal and Laris realise they know a person in common.
Fion wakes Marland during the day again.
Extra scenes not likely to be written
Thoughts from the landlord.
Marland and Wendil (his mum)
Marland first meeting everyone.
Fion's thoughts before and after the mind-wipe. (Yes, it was because of Fion that Ronthar lost his memories, and that's why he got them back when they reconnected. :3)
And now another mini list, for the new stuff that I can find a little easier:
Should Shodin stumble over xeno/xeni?
Not sure if I can take out the 'hell' references since that's being used as a general swear rather than 'the place where people who have sinned' go. And if I used something else to replace hell, it'd be really obvious and out of place. =/ Unless I replaced it with 'fuck', but then it'd just be overused.
Hm. How does Marland's scales grow back? Is his shoulder going to be the least unprotected part of him (apart from his wings) for a while?
Need to check up what colour and shape Shodin's drugs should be at the end.
Maybe have Marland and Shodin start wondering if Puzz had been the cause of Shodin's memory loss after they met Balt.
I need to add more sense descriptions. And descriptions in general.
Make sure Balt doesn't keep eye contact when they first meet.