THE WAY THE WORLD ENDS

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Title: The Way the World Ends
Written By: faile02
Timeline: During and directly after season one
Rating: G
Summary: Daphne was always Brian's biggest advocate.
Author Notes: This is unbeta'd due to a time restraint. Forgive me. This is also my first QaF fic, so any sort of constructive crit would be awesome. 1035 words

Comments

QaF first fic

[firehead30]

This may be your first fic but you have a wonderful way of getting into a side character's head. I enjoyed your Daphne perspective. You also have some really nice lines in here.At first, you thought Brian was going to break him. Justin was trying so hard and you were there for every minute of it, and you liked Brian, you really did, but every time Justin was happy, every time you thought he finally had it together, Brian kicked him in stomach and you had to watch Justin struggle to stay above water. This carried concern, frustration and loyalty, nicely done. But my favorite lines were these:
After Justin went inside, you sat in the car for a few minutes and waited. You waited until you saw Michael leave and you waited even longer until you saw Justin again, tucked carefully under Brian's arm.

It ended with a whimper. Brian leaned down to kiss the top of Justin's head, and you knew everything would be alright. You were always Brian's biggest champion, even when Justin had his doubts, you didn't. From your vantage point across the street you could see the look in Brian's eyes. It was love.

You give background information outside of canon that is believable and true to character. Well done.

Re: QaF first fic

[faile02]

Thank you! It's very flattering to have your fic quoted back at you, I can't even tell you. Daphne's one of my favorite characters (outside of our boys, of course)... she deserved to have her say.