FIC: Downpour

[cruiscin_lan]

Title: Downpour
Characters: Mohinder/Sylar
Rating: R
Word Count: 1843
Disclaimer: I don't own any aspect of Heroes or its characters
Spoilers/Warnings: spoilers for Season 2 and inspiration taken from the graphic novels, particularly "Quarantine."
Summary: In the virus future, Mohinder finds a cure while Sylar suffers from the disease.
A/N:

Comments

[etoiledunord]

Oh!! Thank you for this!! =D

This is exactly what I hoped for - the whole feeling that the world's gone to hell and all that's left is what each individual person can do, and the ties that are left between them. I'm absolutely delighted. ^_^

To quote some of my favourite parts:

His voice was low and husky from disuse - as were his feelings towards Sylar.

I love the weariness in this. And the sense that things could have continued without this visit, but they didn't.

"No one's special anymore," Mohinder muttered. "Everyone's too busy dying."

An excellent description of the "nothing left to lose" feeling behind all this.

It was a sudden decision, a selfish decision, a decision that Mohinder knew he'd live to regret... He stopped and stepped back outside, ready with realization and remorse, but Sylar had already vanished into the downpour.And the snap at the end, followed by Sylar's disappearance. Almost as if Sylar wanted Mohinder to make the decision, but knew he couldn't accept the treatment, given everything that had

[cruiscin_lan]

I'm so glad you liked it! I was thrilled to get you for the exchange, but I was very cautious about writing it. (Sometimes I accidentally veer into writing porn, and I know you're too classy for that).

But I love the post-apocalyptic timelines too, and your prompt totally let that be my playground, so I should be thanking you!

[angary]

OMG, this is amazing. So dark, so bleak, and yet there's that glimmer of hope - and I love that Mohinder is that source of optimism. I love how determined he is in here, that he goes out of his way to try to help the survivors, and his reaction to seeing Sylar is spot on, IMO. Their banter is one of my favorite aspects in their dynamic, and you depicted it in such an awesome way.

The ending broke my heart. I really dug how Mohinder was weighing his options, because it's really fitting for him to do so; his practical side vs. his emotional side. And I was psyching myself out for him going to Sylar and telling him to come inside, but... but... No! It's so perfect, and depressing at the same time.

Favorite lines:

"No one's special anymore," Mohinder muttered. "Everyone's too busy dying."

"Read a book," Mohinder suggested sarcastically. "I have a collection of cat stories I'd be glad to lend you, provided you leave me the hell alone."

<3 the irony in the first line, and how snarky Mohinder is in the second. God, I want to

[cruiscin_lan]

aurilly deserves the most credit for the banter. She's my banter beta: "Snarkier! Snarkier!"

I'm so glad you liked it!

[cookie_simone]

Why doesn't this have more comments? I really liked this fic. I like how hard and cold Mohinder is towards Sylar. It's very him to not be able to let go of what's happened between them in the past, even when the whole world is going to hell. I also like that he's not really fazed by Sylar's sudden appearance. One of my favorite things about Mohinder is his ability to just cope with whatever random crap is thrown his way.

The ending made the emotional masochist in me happy. To have Mohinder decide to help Sylar just a few seconds too late? So frustrating. So depressing. But I love it.

[cruiscin_lan]

Your icon? Total LOLitude.

It was hard fleshing out Mohinder in this fic, because he's a much more complicated character when he's interacting with Sylar. Glad it came across okay. :)

[anothersaturday]

(SO, let's pretend like I'm not a total LAMER who never gets around to reading anything until like a week after it was posted, AHEM.)

Oh my God, I enjoyed this so much! I really feel like it's... something I've never read before, you know? The story (and the way it was told) just seem so original. And I love it's so dark and almost corrosive, but then the characterizations give it a feeling of humanity and keep it from being completely bleak and grim. And the dialogue!

^^^LOL I RAMBLE TOO MUCH. BUT I THINK MY POINT WAS, DAMN, THIS WAS REALLY GOOD.

[cruiscin_lan]

Total lamers are my favorite kind of people! I like to respond to my feedback late, so there you go.

I'm glad the story seemed original to you. I think because I've never really written Mylar before I didn't write myself into corners - I have no corners to write myself into (yet). And I'm glad it didn't totally depress you... :P

And again, aurilly was totally my dialogue coach, so pat her on the back a little next time you see her.

[neshel]

Huh, I completely missed this.

Very interesting fic, very depressing though. =(

[cruiscin_lan]

Thanks for reading, now go read something fluffy :)