Naruto fic: "Haven 4/4" (Naruto/Gaara, NC - 17)

[crazy_toffee]

Title: Haven 4/4
Pairing(s): Naruto/Gaara (unresolved SasuNaru in the back)
Warning(s): Angst-a-bundle.
Genre(s): … angst? Introspection?
Rating: NC - 17
Word Length: 22,500 (in total)
Description: Temari wasn’t entirely honest when she sought Naruto’s help. She said Gaara had been missing for a few days, but he’d been missing for a few weeks

Comments

[crazy_toffee]

Well... wow. Color me flattered. To death. Truly.

I'm honestly glad that the characters felt so IC. Most of the time, I kept rereading and erasing bits, because Naruto whined too much, and Gaara was too emotional. There were some bits where Gaara just had to be raw and exposed, but most of the time, writing his reactions and then making them more restrained was... difficult.

Writing Sasuke was easier because he gets ticked off much more quickly. I liked him in this fic precisely because he was so messed up. Usually, in other fics, I try to get him to resolve his issues... but it worked better here if he continued to be a mess. So, it's good to know he was frustrating to read, because it was frustrating to write him (and yet, probably, this is more IC than actually straightening him out).

there was no rushing of things, but a progress

That's why the fic turned out so long, in the end. I wanted Gaara and Naruto to naturally end up together, but the more I wrote, the more I realized it was something that couldn't just 'happen'.

It's detailed, but not too detailed - you have the right balance.

Aahahaha, that makes me so happy! I keep fearing I'm going to fall of a cliff into the land of purple, purple prose.

Thank you so much for the in-depth review, I loved reading your comments!