TITLE: Close (1/1)
AUTHOR: Jenwyn (
thejennabides)
FANDOM: LOTR RPS
PAIRING: Elijah/Billy
RATING: PG
DISCLAIMER: This is a work of fiction. Made up. Not real. Never happened. Not implying anything. Fiction.
NOTE: Written in 72 minutes for the
contrelamontre three senses challenge.
DEDICATION: for
mcee and
ella_minnow (
Elijah closes his eyes, and it looks exactly the same: )
Comments 10
He’s still not close enough, still not closed enough, it’s still not dark enough. This is so wonderfully written; the repetition gives it a sort of slow urgency, if that makes sense. Bleh - my English teacher would kill me.
Adore the ending. Little Boy Lost Elijah is so sad, yet so lovely. Oh, pathos:)
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Yes, that makes perfect sense to me and I'm so pleased, because it's just what I wanted with the rhythm there: the feeling you get when you're tired, but you can't sleep; desire-induced insomnia, when part of you is reaching for something and part of you wants to go to sleep, and just as you are lulling yourself into sleep - you somehow find yourself more awake than ever. (If that makes any sense!)
Adore the ending.
Thank you! Elijah's last line was the first thing that came to me, and when I started writing I thought it was going to be the beginning of the real story even though it wasn't the first line - but when I got to that point, I found it wanted to be the ending.
Thanks again for reading!
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No problem with the reading - do you have any other stuff around I could take a look at? xx
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do you have any other stuff around I could take a look at?
Yep! Right here, although it hasn't been updated for a couple of weeks, so it's missing the most recent few.
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