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[luthien123]

Title: Get It Faster (Part III, Final)
Author: Liz
Rating: NC-17
Pairing:Billie Joe/Mike
Disclaimer: This never happened, and very likely will never happen. I made it all up. I don’t own Green Day, they are real people. No harm is intended, no money is made… blah blah blah
Notes/Summary:Billie has come over to Mike’s for one last night, but Mike

Comments

[tasyfa]

Billie’s body was a network of bruises, cuts, welts, all seemly seared into the other man’s skin as deeply as the twisting inked lines. But Mike knew they would soon be gone, healed, and the inked names of Billie’s wife, Billie’s children, would remain.And that's it - that, right there. It's a perfect description of how Mike has been trying to hold on and why ultimately he failed, because the ink is deeper than the bruises and it was first

[luthien123]

Ah thank you, I'm soooo gald you got that from the end, the sense that their friendship wasn't ruined... I almost added a epilogue to try to make it clear that they would be able to work through it, that their friendship would survive...because I didn't want a fic that would make it necessary for Green Day to break up, that wasn't the idea, would be very bad. Yes, I actually have to go...gah..but thank you thank you, your comments have really meant a lot.

[tasyfa]

Just read the bottom part - don't apologise for writing the story that wanted to be written, nor for segmenting it. It's well done exactly as it is. :)

[luthien123]

Ah yes and thank you- I always have these little insecurities when I finally post things, even things I've edited and I feel come together. (though this community has been really good for that- for awhile I wouldn't show anyone the stories I wrote). I'm kinda over it now though...maybe I'll modify the bottom comment. Hmmmmm.

[drumheaven]

tears so sad but still kinda happy coz i dun know there was something bout them getting to spend one last night together even tho biting and stuff happened billie understood ohhhh hmmmm gd work tho

[luthien123]

Haha, thanks!! Thanks for sharing your reaction, and thanks for commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[shadowavenger]

Freaky, almost scary, but gripping. Wonderfully written, as if you took this bitter fucked-up situation and glazed it with lust and desperation and wrongs on both sides and made it compelling, so I couldn't cry for Mike or feel sorry for Billie getting fucked into exhaustion but just keep reading and now I'm attempting to put this into a coherent comment and I think I've failed. I don't know how to feel emotionally about how it all ended, but it was brilliant.

[luthien123]

Ah thank you! I loved your comment, and it was definitly coherent :) Yeah- about how to feel at the end, I tried to make both sides fairly equal in emotional legitimacy, I didn't want a "good guy " and a "bad guy", so I'm glad to hear your emotions were mixed at the end, because mine were too, lol. Thank you again for reading and commenting!

[clobert]

That was the perfect ending ♥

Mike's emotions didn't change, but neither did Billie's -- that was definitely the right ending, and as tasyfa said, you didn't take the easy way out [Kudos to you for that :D].

I really don't know who to feel more sorry for, Mike or Billie. Billie obviously does have feelings of a sort for Mike, but the tug of his family is inevitably stronger, and I can almost feel his pain at being so trapped, so 'caught in the middle' so to speak. Mike, on the other hand, is the hopelessly in love character that we always love and feel for.

The realization almost hurt to read -- you knew that it was coming, and when the bombshell hit, I could really see it playing out before my eyes.

Hmm, seeing as this fic is mostly sex, I didn't know if the whole 'being able to see it happening' thing is good or bad, but still :)

And Mike knew with a certainty that turned his blood to ice that this was the truth, knew it as surely as he had known that those past I love you’s were false. I think that sentence really hit home;

[luthien123]

Thank you thank you thank you!! I don't think I could have written a different ending than this, the whole thing would have seemed...wrong. I only chose to extend out from the first part, Mike's encounter with Mr. X, when I realized this was where it would go, that this was even stronger than the ending for that first part. And I got to explore more of Billie's motivations, which I think the first part needed...yes, so I'm extremely glad you liked the ending. *Big smile*

Onward...yeah, I guess this fic is mostly sex...hmmm..interesting, since sex is really what I'm most insecure writing. I think here I wanted it as a back drop that would highlight and intensify the emotions they were feeling...if that makes any sense. Hm.

And that line- Billie's tired line, that gave me the most trouble of anything, I nearly took it out, it almost seemed too...I don't know. But I left it in, because ultimately it fit, and I guess I was hoping people would catch that double meaning, again going back to the goal of sex tying in with emotions.

[clobert]

Not at all, my dear :)
*friends you right fawking back* ♥