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[luthien123]

Title: Get It Faster (Part III, Final)
Author: Liz
Rating: NC-17
Pairing:Billie Joe/Mike
Disclaimer: This never happened, and very likely will never happen. I made it all up. I don’t own Green Day, they are real people. No harm is intended, no money is made… blah blah blah
Notes/Summary:Billie has come over to Mike’s for one last night, but Mike

Comments

[clobert]

That was the perfect ending ♥

Mike's emotions didn't change, but neither did Billie's -- that was definitely the right ending, and as tasyfa said, you didn't take the easy way out [Kudos to you for that :D].

I really don't know who to feel more sorry for, Mike or Billie. Billie obviously does have feelings of a sort for Mike, but the tug of his family is inevitably stronger, and I can almost feel his pain at being so trapped, so 'caught in the middle' so to speak. Mike, on the other hand, is the hopelessly in love character that we always love and feel for.

The realization almost hurt to read -- you knew that it was coming, and when the bombshell hit, I could really see it playing out before my eyes.

Hmm, seeing as this fic is mostly sex, I didn't know if the whole 'being able to see it happening' thing is good or bad, but still :)

And Mike knew with a certainty that turned his blood to ice that this was the truth, knew it as surely as he had known that those past I love you’s were false.

I think that sentence really hit home; the realisation that Billie had been lying all the while, and that things really couldn't work out between them; such a painful moment, but wonderfully put across.

“You what?” Billie felt shock, disbelief No…he wouldn’t…why would he do that?

“I fucked him,” Mike said, leaning in so his lips brushed the corner of Billie’s mouth “And the whole time, I was thinking about you.”

Oh, Mikey…

Oh, Mikey indeed ♥

“God Mike…I’m so tired…” the singer’s voice was barely above a whisper, breathed out after his body had crashed down once again.

I really loved that too, for some reason. Maybe because I picture it as being exhaustion from the whole situation, not just physically from all the sex. But I always read way too much into these things, so please feel free to tell me to be quiet :)

Mike’s body twitched as the shower started, settling as the soft drops began to fall, roaring through his blood as they washed Billie clean of this, their one last night.

Guh, that perfect ending again ♥

Really, wonderful work, I'm sorry to have rambled so long, but I do hope to see more of you in the future. I'm printing this out to read again later :)

[luthien123]

Thank you thank you thank you!! I don't think I could have written a different ending than this, the whole thing would have seemed...wrong. I only chose to extend out from the first part, Mike's encounter with Mr. X, when I realized this was where it would go, that this was even stronger than the ending for that first part. And I got to explore more of Billie's motivations, which I think the first part needed...yes, so I'm extremely glad you liked the ending. *Big smile*

Onward...yeah, I guess this fic is mostly sex...hmmm..interesting, since sex is really what I'm most insecure writing. I think here I wanted it as a back drop that would highlight and intensify the emotions they were feeling...if that makes any sense. Hm.

And that line- Billie's tired line, that gave me the most trouble of anything, I nearly took it out, it almost seemed too...I don't know. But I left it in, because ultimately it fit, and I guess I was hoping people would catch that double meaning, again going back to the goal of sex tying in with emotions. So yeah, I love it when people read into things, your comment was amazing. Also- would you mind if I friended you?

[clobert]

Not at all, my dear :)
*friends you right fawking back* ♥