DVD commentary track

[circ_bamboo]

Pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, from anything I've written in this journal, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted). I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's

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[boosette]

It would be mean to just leave a naked link to any of the epic OT3s. Therefore I pick this:

If Pike didn’t know her so well, he may not have been able to tell the subtle difference between her stillness before she was awake and after. He can see it, though, easily, in the line of her shoulder, so close to him; he can hear it in her breath, barely altered, but obvious enough to him. He wishes he could hide the fact that he’s awake, but he can’t. Not only is it too late; but she’s Illyrian, and the icing on the cake is that she knows him nearly as well as he knows her

[circ_bamboo]

Oh, man. This is one of those stories that went through so many revisions. At first, they were going to wake up in bed together and have no idea how they got there. Then, she knew but he didn't. And then, she knew and he didn't know and it happened more than once. (And I think I had a short email discussion with you about how Phil would possibly had let him out of Sickbay with a concussion

[boosette]

I AM FILLED WITH FLAILY GLEE. I mean. Not that they're aching and not together, but -- oh, you know. Knowing this makes it better.

and Pike, um, pretty much just pines.

(there is a deeply bad pun there that I'm not making. instead I will use appropriate icon is appropriate)

[secretsolitaire]

From chapter 7 of Nine Years Later:

Jamie was so close by, and his brain was clamoring simultaneously to shift to close the distance and to back away. He remained, frozen in place

[circ_bamboo]

Hokay. *cracks knuckles*

First, I did actually write most of this story in order, so by the time I got to that point in Ch. 7, I knew there was no possible way I could pitch Kirk & McCoy into bed together without dragging the story out for another 50K words, to give McCoy time to get used to the whole men thing. He's pretty sure at this moment that he's got feelings for Jamie that go a bit beyond gratitude and brotherhood, and it probably freaks him out less that he's in love with him than the fact that he's attracted to him, but he's still just plain freaked out about everything.

So the best resolution for them would be some sort of "Hey, give me time, but that's definitely not a no" from McCoy.

Jamie had been stuck dancing with a lot of young women he did not want to dance with for the entire story (well, he didn't mind dancing with Eve, but she wasn't his type, as we all know) so I figured it would be nice to let him dance with someone he actually wanted to dance with

[secretsolitaire]

I knew there was no possible way I could pitch Kirk & McCoy into bed together without dragging the story out for another 50K words, to give McCoy time to get used to the whole men thing.

I would kill to read that story. Not that you didn't end in the perfect place...just saying. I was really sucked into their relationship, and the question of how they'd deal with homosexuality in this era was so interesting. :-)

And the bit about blue coats was just a riff on medical-blue.

I picked up on that. \o/

Jamie had been stuck dancing with a lot of young women he did not want to dance with for the entire story (well, he didn't mind dancing with Eve, but she wasn't his type, as we all know) so I figured it would be nice to let him dance with someone he actually wanted to dance with.

But I didn't consciously pick up on this! Although it's so clear and right now that you say it. :-)

I think they're not wearing gloves here, which is okay since they're at home and not in public, but it also makes it that much racier. ;)HOT

[rubynye]

... what I want most is just to hear more about the entirety of "Not With Your Face". Or just discourse upon a chunk if you like; I just want to hear more about Lt. Campos and that tale. :)

http://circ-bamboo.livejournal.com/24266.html

[circ_bamboo]

I got her name out of a random name generator. :) I don't really have an idea of what she looks like in my head, but probably short and dark-haired. (Not the least of which because Trek needs more short women, damnit

[rubynye]

Her phone number? *grins hopefully*

Seriously, thank you, a lot. I like to think of everything in here, not least Jim getting his ass kicked as a learning experience.

And Trek needs more short women!