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latin_doll February 9 2007, 23:32:25 UTC
Question: it has taken them two weeks from the border to Munz, and they haven't found a bathtub anywhere and thus sorted out the I-kinda-don't-wanna-undress-problem already? I mean, I think I get your explanation, but first of all, eurgh (and on the clean sheets, too), and secondly I think it'd have manifested itself before Munz.

*reads on* Also, they've been shooed away by Shufti to have a wash, and then there's dinner and stuff, and then... Anyway, I believe that needs fixing.

I told you already how I feel about their arriving. Exactly how I imagined it.

I'm not really sure even Mal can line a not-eve-one-year-old girl up and make her sing filthy songs for Polly. So maybe there should be another kid between her and Jack?

- She wants to shed them like a skin that’s grown too small, leave them behind (burn them), forget what happened.That, and the whole two paragraphs, is quite beautiful. And it's so... sad, how they're taking these tiny little steps to get reaquainted with normality and it doesn't work. (Cruel ( ... )

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latin_doll February 9 2007, 23:34:22 UTC
Of course, there had to be at least one unclosed tag, and right at the end, too.

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amazon_syren February 10 2007, 00:57:31 UTC
HAhahahahahahahaha! :-D

Of course there does. :-D

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amazon_syren February 10 2007, 01:13:38 UTC
Okay, yes. Two weeks.
However it's two weeks with no money what-so-ever, not even army IOUs. So no inns, and (remarkably) no abandonned buildings with convenient bath-tubs and humerous board-of-tourism-inspired wall-paper. (They would look a bit like rose buds from a distance, but if you looked closely, you'd see they were actually tiny beets. Welcome to Borog(ra)via. ;-)

Agreed about the extra kid. Possibly Tilly (short for Tilda). Or not. :-)

Re: Shufti & Bathing: Yes, good point. This does need fixing. :-)
Also, note: They actually slept on top of the blankets, rather than getting under the sheets. Partly out of respect for whoever is currently doing the washing, but mostly out of exhaustion, I think. :-)

Re: Beautiful: Yay! :-D <*Is delighted and honoured all to pieces ( ... )

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latin_doll February 11 2007, 21:11:20 UTC
Yes, 'realistic' is what I meant. PTSD is pretty likely at this point (...damn), although there are people who survive traumatic events without ever developing a stress disorder. Some people say there's a genetic disposition, but no-one seems to be quite sure. And even if they don't, it's still not sunshine and daisies.

We're cruel.

Mal-inna-apron fic would be appreciated :D

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amazon_syren February 11 2007, 23:27:49 UTC
Re: Post Traumatic Stress Disorder: Yep, that it is. (Urk...). Definitely not sunshine and daisies, at the very least. :-)

Re: Apron Fic: <*giggle*> I will do what I can. :-)

Hey, random bit of information you totally don't need: I seem to be having trouble getting back into my relatively-sunshine-&-daisies ficverse after writing this. Believe it or not. It's kind of wierd.

I'm trying to write that thing where they Deal with the whole Vanya thing and why Mal doesn't ever want to be touched Like That ever again. By anyone. Including Polly who only has the sweetest and most loveing intentions in mind. :-)
And it's a real neusance because my brain keeps chiming in with "But she can't run her fingers through Polly's hair -- it all got shaved off, remember?" or "But they wouldn't possibly be ready for that kind of intimacy after all that. Not yet!" And other stuff like that there.

As such, Mal-inna-Apron fic might work as a nice transition. :-)

Oo! Dinner time! Must dash. :-D

- TTFN,
- Amazon. :-)

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latin_doll February 13 2007, 09:11:55 UTC
I know :D Sometimes it's really hard to juggle ficverses. Am so looking forward to the apron fic. And the other one.

You have dinner at weird times XD

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amazon_syren February 13 2007, 13:20:19 UTC
Re: Dinner: Evening Meal (not to be confused with Lunch, noon-time meal... Some places they're called Supper and Dinner, I think. Um?)

Also, Re: Dinner: My husband gets home at, like, 7:30pm. Given that he used to get home at, like, 11:30pm, we've decided to just have dinner together when he gets home. :-) Deal with it, says I. ;-)

Re: Juggling ficverses: Yay! Continuity! :-D (Although, granted, there's some (largely sexual) scenarios that I'd like to write that just can't work in the Amazon!Verse due to their relationship only getting started areound the point when Polly becomes an Officer. She wouldn't likely be on Guard Duty in Lancre (with Mal teasing her mercilessly by telling her about this play where two guardsmen are on duty and one of them talks the other to orgasm -- a play that actually exists, we had it in my highschool library, no less) as an officer. And I do *so* want to give her a reason to enjoy her Dress-Uniform skirt. ;-)
<*sigh ( ... )

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latin_doll February 14 2007, 18:18:40 UTC
It was a semi-funny comment on timezones and their inherent humourous value, actually :D

And I do *so* want to give her a reason to enjoy her Dress-Uniform skirt. ;-)

Just write it and say it's AU and the post it for us all to see, you tease

(although it does not get declaimed on Mal's knees, because it's more personal than that. :-)

I am confused. More personal?

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amazon_syren February 15 2007, 12:07:28 UTC
Re: Time zones: Oh, er. :-\ Woops. ;-) Clearly I didn't catch that bit. ;-)

Re: Skirt Fic: Hehehe. You know, I don't think I ever claimed that I wasn't a tease. :-D

Re: More personal: Well, that's the thing. I think she'd probably have little, if any, problem declaiming rhyming inuendo on her knees. (This is the same woman, after, all, who lined up a couple of under-ten-year-olds and had them sing about sex cake). However the poem in question is very bad written on the subject of the Healing Process and Polly's very important roll therein. As such it deals with (or at least hints at) things that the Neurotic Twosome have decided Not to Talk About in front of the family, in order to spare them the nightmares.
See?
Make a bit more sense now? :-D

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latin_doll February 16 2007, 11:13:49 UTC
Tease!

Yep, makes more sense :D Although I have to wonder why Mal would try to work out these things in a poem. Though that might be her natural affinity for dramatic effect.

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amazon_syren February 16 2007, 20:06:03 UTC
Re: Tease: <*winks*>

Re: Poem: She's not working them out. She's *expressing* them (having already worked them out, at least enough to be able to articulate them, in her own head). and she's doing so in a heartfelt and eloquent way (at least that's the theory) all to naturally dramatic effect. I hope. ;-)

:-D

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latin_doll February 17 2007, 19:08:08 UTC
Yes, but in a poem! These things are hard enough to talk about even without iambic pentameter!

But I'm glad she's worked them out and I'd like to read it now plz.

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amazon_syren February 17 2007, 19:20:00 UTC
It's an abstract poem. There's rhyme, but no specific meter.

Re: reading it: Still working. It's... wierd. It's all broken up into pieces, and I need to sort of... condense it so that only the important bits are there.

The skirt-fic is coming along (slowly, but it's coming... I don't do 'talk dirty to me' very well. I can write about it happening, but I have no idea how someone would atually *talk* about, well, the meticulous way they would go about performing extended cunilingus due to the easy access provided by the recipient wearing a skirt instead of trousers. At least not without sounding either really crass, really laughably stupid, or really... like the way I write when I'm describing it (flowery much?)... so I'm not actually letting Mal do much talking. I'm just discussing Polly's reactions to what Mal is telling her.
We'll see if it works. :-)

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latin_doll February 19 2007, 19:35:25 UTC
slowly, but it's coming

omg a pun is impending

Also, while I think that Mal might have a flowery approach to dirty talking (I mean, she must have read some books, right?), Polly might go a more literal route and be all, "... do what on my what?

Which could be all kinds of hilarious, I think.

Write fic now plz. :D

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amazon_syren February 19 2007, 21:51:25 UTC
Re: Pun: Oog. I have the urge to thump my head against my desk in woe, while, at the same time, to also giggle maddly at the truth of it.
<*sigh*>
That's the reaction puns normally provoke in me, though, so: Meh! :-D

Re: Fic: Fic is, er, moving quickly towards the climax in a very litteral way.

Note: Am now wondering if I can work in the following:

"Just wait 'til I get my hands on you," Polly grumbled, flushed with embarrassment... er... yes. That was it. Embarrassment.
Mal's amused chuckle, which could only be called anticipatory, was possibly worse than any double-entendre she could have offered.
"I'd rather like it if you got your hands on me, actually," she answered. "But you'll have to wait 'til I'm done with you."

Or, well, something like that, anyway... :-)

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