chantey dilemma
OK, so I'm working on this song about Ernest Shackleton and the Endurance and that epic survival tale, but I'm a bit stuck on the chorus. I was going to use:
Though the icebergs may clash, and the great waves may roll
The mighty ship Endurance is a-sailing toward the pole
...except the ship sinks midway through the song. Maybe I could just change the tense when that happens? Changing the whole chorus is not an option, because people will be singing along.
Here are some other options.
Sort Of Sentimental Version:
Let the sea fill your heart, let the wind stir your soul
Remember the Endurance and her journey to the pole
(Or, to steal from the song whose tune I'm using, I could make the first line: And it's cheer up, me lads, let the wind stir your soul...)
Subtle But Shameless Pun Version:
Though the icebergs may clash, and the great waves may roll
The Age of Exploration lives in every earnest soul
Which of these would you go for? Or none of the above? The chorus is the most important bit, so I want to get it right.
Though the icebergs may clash, and the great waves may roll
The mighty ship Endurance is a-sailing toward the pole
...except the ship sinks midway through the song. Maybe I could just change the tense when that happens? Changing the whole chorus is not an option, because people will be singing along.
Here are some other options.
Sort Of Sentimental Version:
Let the sea fill your heart, let the wind stir your soul
Remember the Endurance and her journey to the pole
(Or, to steal from the song whose tune I'm using, I could make the first line: And it's cheer up, me lads, let the wind stir your soul...)
Subtle But Shameless Pun Version:
Though the icebergs may clash, and the great waves may roll
The Age of Exploration lives in every earnest soul
Which of these would you go for? Or none of the above? The chorus is the most important bit, so I want to get it right.