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[recurrence]

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Comments

Re: Matty apper

[arse_nick]

Okay, you had a lot of potential, I did find some lines really snicker worthy and there was a sense of strong purpose in your app. For example, the running trends of the video game was good but so much of your app skipped around. Mentioning mosquitoes to House of the Dead, to Donkey Kong, back to House of the Dead. It made your app seem longer than necessary. I think this is one of the few times where an app had too much. The quality in it was good! But for someone who's an apprentice world's greatest detective (I haven't read DN so I can't comment on anything beyond what your canon says) he seems a little less than analytical? Not in the apathy way, although that part came through, just in the format. Likewise the name dropping of Mello just felt sort of tacked on. I know Mello is important to him so mentioning him would be okay but when he does it feels like there isn't much of a purpose and drive for this person he spends most of his canon appearances with, which conflicts.

I hope these comments made sense. I really do think if you tweaked stuff like that you would do so much better, you already have a lot of potential.