PB Fic: The Most Beautiful Flower On Earth - Chapter Seven (Part Two)

[burntcircles]

Title: The Most Beautiful Flower On Earth (7(2)/8)
Author: burntcircles
Characters/Pairing: Michael Scofield/Sara Tancredi, Jane Phillips, Original Characters
Genre/Rating: Gen to Het / R (for language)
Spoilers: S1, S2, S3
Length: ~ 7,400 words
Disclaimer: Prison Break and its characters are a property of Fox Studios. The original characters and this AU

Comments

[in_a_bluemoon]

"there were more important things to consider. Like making the perfect Napolitano, and holding your woman, kissing her with your soul. The smell of the sea drifted in, strong and comforting."

Oh My God, woman.

*sigh* I have no words... not just now anyway... it is late and my heart is spilling over. and what a lovely bed time story for me *holds it close to my heart* :)

[burntcircles]

Thank you! Didn't think you'd still be up, so your comment was a lovely surprise. *loves your icon*

*hugs for Jasper*

[rosie_spleen]

Yeah. Like in_a_bluemoon I don't really know what to say. !!!111??

Wow. That seems to be a good word. The fact I love, hate, love, hate Ann. The idea that reading Sylvia Plath when you are so low is often not so great, even though it seems a good notion at the time.

The fact Ann calls him Michael for the first time. The reunion between Michael and Sara which I love, love, hate, love. The final two sentences that completely blow me away. The questions I have about Ann's future, about a possible relationship between Ann and Sara that's not based on Ann's (possible) jealousy or Sara's (possible) hostility

OMG.

I'm not coping. Thanks so much for this fic, Nona. I love it very much. I'm glad you are going to include an epilogue, because I think we all need it.

[burntcircles]

The reunion between Michael and Sara which I love, love, hate, love.

Hm, 3 out of four ain't bad, considering in a happier universe Sara would be holding Michael's hand and not Ann, and the fact that this happened really spoiled the reunion even for me, lol.

Oh, I think Ann and Sara will be just fine, with their respective tomorrows and with each other. *g*

I'm glad that the closing sentences worked for you, because I thought they were a little weak. Thanks for reading through this quickly, Rosie. It eases my anxiety a lot. *g*

[rosie_spleen]

I'm outta here now after a busy day in the office, but I just want to say there is no need to be anxious about the fic, Nona. I'm no expert, but it is wonderful. I know you won't believe me totally (in fact, now you probably think I'm a stalker who cannot shut up) but it's a perfectly fitting finale before the epilogue.

You have avoided the cliche ride into the sunset. This is absolutely fine. Take a bow.

[rosie_spleen]

What I really mean is that this is the best original fic I've read. I think. I don't know how to describe it actually, and your writing is so damned precise and lulling. I'm agog.

It's good to be agog, Nona. The world needs more gogs.

Thanks again. More later maybe. I must run. Literally.

[burntcircles]

Aww, Rosie. Best original fic? I'm melting! Only my hands are left, finishing this reply. Thanks again, Rosie. :)

[rosie_spleen]

I'm going now. Melting away.....gooooodddddbyyyyyyeeee

[lizzyyuan]

I want to calm down first, like Joe, then write a proper review rationally, blessing me. *deep breath

[burntcircles]

I am very relieved to know that you found the reunion realistic. I want these two to be happy, but somehow, Michael being the kind of person he is, would not take a revelation like this easily, especially after all the paranoia in the mountains. But you just know that once he's taken everything in, boy, oh boy, he's going to be happy. And we all know how Michael is when Sara makes him happy. *g*

What happened to Sara is realistic too, but I think it’s not very convincing that she didn’t know Michael believed she had been dead, since her fake death was spreaded widely, all Sona convicts knew, even Ann’s father knew, Bruce didn’t know that? Sara thought Michael might have forgotten her? Maybe I had a misunderstanding about it, Nona, help me understand, please.Oh yes, there are still some gaps, one that needs more exposition to explain, and I hope the epilogue does that. I felt this chapter, already at 13,000 words, would have bogged down from too much info

[lizzyyuan]

I know from Ann's point of view, even a kiss is a challenge, especially these two are not the type of public affection-show. But…but…*tears* it’s the reunion. And, Ann, it’s time to peep from your 2nd floor. I need you peep!!!!

Where is the epilogue? I want to see it NOW! I know I have said it too many times!*blushes* Nona, will it be posted in this week?

[burntcircles]

Hahahahaha. You really are funny, do you know that? I know, I know, it's the reunion, and we need some LOVE. *g* Hmm, the second floor, I didn't think of that. I was actually thinking of something, uh, nearer.

[sk56]

At some point I'll go back and do that thing you do with a reading group, where you look for the places where you learned certain things, in this case where I first thought that perhaps the ending would be something of what it is. But right now I'm just happy to let it be.

You've done a hard thing here, carefully guiding us from one assumption to another possibility, like a ship captain who knows all the details of the way when the passengers don't even know the destination, but you've done an even harder thing by taking us there so gracefully.

Many thanks for taking this trip, and many, many thanks for letting us follow along.

[burntcircles]

*smiles* It's been my pleasure.

Well, to be honest, it has not been entirely pleasurable. It pleases me that the final product is fine, but being new at this, the process has been quite difficult. Writing fanfiction is hard. I started this fic for purely selfish reasons -- I thought this character that I admired was lost forever -- and I wanted Michael to grieve. I realize now that I would be lying if I said that I didn't care if people read this or not. When people leave nice comments, it not only means they see something good in the way I write, but it also means that they agree with the way the characters are written, which means they share my sorrow. It's a kind of solidarity that is very affirming, and I never imagined I would find it in this manner.

Thanks sk56. It's been an honor to see your words in my LJ.