PB Fic: The Most Beautiful Flower On Earth - Chapter Seven (Part Two)

[burntcircles]

Title: The Most Beautiful Flower On Earth (7(2)/8)
Author: burntcircles
Characters/Pairing: Michael Scofield/Sara Tancredi, Jane Phillips, Original Characters
Genre/Rating: Gen to Het / R (for language)
Spoilers: S1, S2, S3
Length: ~ 7,400 words
Disclaimer: Prison Break and its characters are a property of Fox Studios. The original characters and this AU

Comments

[lizzyyuan]

I want to calm down first, like Joe, then write a proper review rationally, blessing me. *deep breath*

I knew it was Sara, my suspicion turns out to be true. One intriguing aspect of ch7 is kinda like reading an Agatha Christie. Yeah, the visitor is YOU, Sara, heehee.

The reunion, OMG, it’s so realistic and powerful. Although I’m very sad that there was just a POSSIBLE hand-contact involved, I should admit (reluctantly!) that after 4 years life without hope Michael can’t just jump into her arms, cry like a baby, kiss with tears and mumbled something like ”I’m so glad to see you I thought you were…” He needs time to relight hope, then needs time to BEGIN to believe it is very real.

What happened to Sara is realistic too, but I think it’s not very convincing that she didn’t know Michael believed she had been dead, since her fake death was spreaded widely, all Sona convicts knew, even Ann’s father knew, Bruce didn’t know that? Sara thought Michael might have forgotten her? Maybe I had a misunderstanding about it, Nona, help me understand, please.

Back to the reunion, it’s very realistic and so romantic in an angst way. Like Ann, my eyes welled up when “I lift my lids and all is born again”. But I’m needy and clingy and shallow. This made me thirst for hug & kiss badly. Please, Nona, please write them happy and relax for once, in epilogue? pretty please?

P.S.：“Matang alak, matang alak!” and some other inclined words, what does that mean? Is it Spanish? I’m interested.

[burntcircles]

I am very relieved to know that you found the reunion realistic. I want these two to be happy, but somehow, Michael being the kind of person he is, would not take a revelation like this easily, especially after all the paranoia in the mountains. But you just know that once he's taken everything in, boy, oh boy, he's going to be happy. And we all know how Michael is when Sara makes him happy. *g*

What happened to Sara is realistic too, but I think it’s not very convincing that she didn’t know Michael believed she had been dead, since her fake death was spreaded widely, all Sona convicts knew, even Ann’s father knew, Bruce didn’t know that? Sara thought Michael might have forgotten her? Maybe I had a misunderstanding about it, Nona, help me understand, please.

Oh yes, there are still some gaps, one that needs more exposition to explain, and I hope the epilogue does that. I felt this chapter, already at 13,000 words, would have bogged down from too much info. :)

Hmm, so you need a hug and a kiss, huh? Kind of challenging when I have to write it from Ann's point of view, but consider it done. *g*

"Matang alak", as are all the other local words I've used here, are Filipino. The island I've set this story in is in the northern part of the Philippines, quite near to Taiwan, but not as close as I've depicted here. The dialect the locals use there is Ivatan, but I don't know enough Ivatan for what I needed to say, so I stuck to Filipino. E pour si muove is Italian.

Thank you so much for reading, lizzyyuan! I always end up smiling after reading your comments. Your enthusiasm is contagious.

[lizzyyuan]

I know from Ann's point of view, even a kiss is a challenge, especially these two are not the type of public affection-show. But…but…*tears* it’s the reunion. And, Ann, it’s time to peep from your 2nd floor. I need you peep!!!!

Where is the epilogue? I want to see it NOW! I know I have said it too many times!*blushes* Nona, will it be posted in this week?

[burntcircles]

Hahahahaha. You really are funny, do you know that? I know, I know, it's the reunion, and we need some LOVE. *g* Hmm, the second floor, I didn't think of that. I was actually thinking of something, uh, nearer.

[lizzyyuan]

Can I make friends with you? um, more specific, can I have your MSN and chat on-line?

I hope you accept my offer wholeheartedly, but if it isn't proper, that's OK, I'll understand.

mine is: zhouyuan95@hotmail.com
^_^

[burntcircles]

I've added you to my list of contacts on MSN. *g* A notification email will be sent to you, I think.