[Naruto][Drabble][InoSaku]

[dustbunny105]

Title: One Way or the Other
Fandom: Naruto
Characters: Yamanaka Ino, Haruno Sakura, OC
Pairing: InoSaku
Word Count: 100
Rating: PG13
Summary: Second person perspective. You don't know quite how this will go, but you know exactly how it will end up.
Notes: For femslash100 prompt #354 peace.

Comments

[hokuton_punch]

Hee! Very cute - I bet that's going to be one interesting anniversary. XD

[dustbunny105]

Thank you, glad you liked it! And, yeah, I wouldn't bet against you there XD

[scherrymouse]

-giggles- Oh, Ino!

The second person was a little confusing to me at first - my mind got stuck on trying to figure out whether it was a specific person, though I guess it's supposed to be a way of drawing the reader into the narrator's exasperation, and the experience of eavesdropping? (and the white noise of conversation just too quiet to follow.) In any case, I eventually adjusted, and by the end thought it was pretty effective. :)

This is only the second drabble of yours I've read, but so far my impression is that you do a great job of capturing the volatile nature of Sakura and Ino's interactions... I mean, obviously in canon they aren't in this kind of relationship, but I think their volatility would remain if they were, and I think you write that really well. I especially love Sakura's comment about surgery being so much fun. Lol!

Again, you also use the prompt wonderfully. I've not thought about it before this, but I imagine all of their anniversaries could be interesting...

A fun and cute drabble. :)

[dustbunny105]

Heh, sorry for the confusion! In hindsight, I should probably have noted in the header that the narrator isn't anyone in particular

[scherrymouse]

It's fine, I need the practice at using my brain. ;)

/more than you ever wanted to know

Maybe I'm a bit weird, but I actually tend to find authors' thoughts on their work and their writing processes pretty fascinating. Thank you for the explanation! I completely agree with your reasoning - second person works the best (I don't understand when people hate it being used ever). 'commanding' is a great word for it.

I think they're the kind of couple whose anniversaries could be smooth sailing and rainbows all the way-- and yet somehow never are.

Haha, that's perfect! I'd love to see this in a drabble series of some kind, actually... ^_~

You're welcome! I always try to elaborate in my reviews; I'm relieved to hear you appreciate it.

[dustbunny105]

Whew, glad my babbling was welcome! I personally adore hearing about every last detail in other people's writing processes, but I always feel like I'm talking too much when I explain myself. I don't understand the hate for second person either; I've only ever used it twice (though in the other fic, "you" are Sakura) and both times I felt that it was to the benefit of the work.

Hee, I've actually thought about writing something in that vein. I just haven't been able to work out any scenarios I especially like. Ah, well. Maybe someday.

Thank you again! I love getting long reviews, and I especially appreciate them for short works like this.