Guh, I can't believe this.  This was my latest rewrite of that story.  It's more linear and solid, but too short and not nearly as entertaining.    Soo, how do I combine the good qualities of both? huh?

From space the continental city of Areopagus could be seen clearly, a gray-brown swath over what had once been North America. At the hub of the ( Read more... )

At the sidewalk Tommie waited with Liam beside her until she saw Alice’s cherry red Toyota hybrid pull into the parking lot. When Alice, Tristan, and Willow stepped out of the car, throbbing with music as it was, Liam gave Tommie a curt nod and walked back inside.
“Who was that kid?”
Tommie looked up. “Just a kid I know, Tristan. What are you doing ( Read more... )

I'm posting this because....I think I got the characters' voices quite well.  My professor said this wasn't a story, it was a story seed, so I suppose she was probably right (she was on some best seller list so I assume she knew what she was talking about at least a little).  That said, it may not be complete, but I think it's probably somewhat ( Read more... )