Chisato vs Ryuhei

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http://community.livejournal.com/br_roleplay/693580.html

Chisato Matsui vs Ryuhei Sasagawa.

Kill Wound Fail.

24 hours from 21:19, all comments screened. Good luck Milkman :O

Comments

WOUND

[yoshi_kuninobu]

The main downfall for Ryuhei here would have to be simply not posting enough with enough stuff, if that makes any sense... So far on the island, I can't really remember Ryuhei for much other than him being like Akamatsu at his old school. I just don't feel like I know him very well, and as it stands, I definitely don't know him as well as I know Chisato. If Ryuhei survives this, I'd like to learn more about him, and, hopefully, he'll even get a chance to run into another kid to further his development.

Writing-wise, he's been written pretty well. There aren't any significant grammar mistakes that I can see, and his posts are easy to get through. Same thing when it comes to Chisato - very well-written posts. But, Chisato's pretty much got him beat when it comes to every other area. She's got many flashbacks, and she's a character that everyone knows very well.

I just wish that Ryuhei could have had some in-game interactions with some students on the island. I think that the main breaker for him with most of the votes is going to be from not interacting enough with others, or atleast, that's the breaker with me. As it is, we haven't gotten enough of Ryuhei and from what I can see, I think he does deserve to have another chance to show more of himself, so I'm voting WOUND on this one.