Fic: No Small Injury, Chapter One of Nine

[bob_fish]

My small but perfectly formed flist may have heard me go on about a multi-part sequel to  Wrong Turn. This is it! There will be mystery, action, suspense, cliffhangers, chapter illustrations, hopefully a few lulz and of course, buckets of sexual tension. This is also a sequel to  Fight On, Second Lieutenant!, because Havoc and Rebecca won't leave my

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[havocmangawip]

Oh wow this was a good surprise to come home to! I can hardly wait to see more... there are so many possibilities for intrigue and even though she DIES in the beginning, Katie is fleshed out and likable.

[bob_fish]

Hoorah for comments! There will be intrigue, yes. (and Havoc POV in the next chapter, you'll be pleased to hear). Glad you liked Katie - creating an interesting OC without having them steal the limelight from the main characters is quite a difficult balancing act. The fact that she's TOTALLY DEAD kind of helped.

[bob_fish]

I've been feeling so guilty about what I've done to poor Ed/Win (they're an adorable pairing), so I'm glad it was sad in a good way! Ed is such a lummox. I've been salvaging my guilt by working on a bit of Ed/Win fluff to post as a peace offering.

[bob_fish]

So happy you enjoyed this (illustrations included) and Wrong Turn! Glad you liked Rebecca, too - it was a bit of a risk starting with a minor character's POV. I'm increasingly fond of her as a character - she's only been in about three scenes in the manga, but she makes a big impression. I like loads of different pairings in FMA, but Ed/Roy have got to be my favourite. It's great to be writing them again - stay tuned!

[bob_fish]

Love the icon! It's a-comin' in the next hour or two - right now I'm just working out the bugs in the code, because I am a blogging fool. But it's going live today, never fear! It's lovely to see someone's excited about it XD

[sara_rojo]

INSTANT LOVE!!
Interesting quote for an interesting title. Already I can see this is going to be nothing like the good, straight, honesty simple action violence that we had in Worng Turn. It's gonna be messy, underhanded, dirty and amoral, and I LOVE IT TO PIECES.

I love your Rebecca for two reasons: she sounds incredibly believable as a young woman, and she doesn't sound like your Hawkeye, who also sounds very believable as a woman. Oh, and she's banging Havoc, but that's actually something to like him about (the fact that she considers him man enough for herXD). I think her working relationship with Mustang started out very funny, it actually reminded me of one of my dad's secretaries (also thought he was good-looking, and also dismissed it as bullshit after two days of workaholic tendenciesXD)
What has Mustang so distracted, I wonder? Apart from, you know, the whole crazy unstable political situation, and he being in the middle of it?

The metro had been full of people who, for the most part, were younger, drunker and cheerier

[sara_rojo]

Since their return after the coup, Central seemed to be springing to life around them - bars, cabaret, music, art, weird radical street theatre that made no sense

This was glorious, because it's probably Al and Ed themselves who sprang to life after their long quest ended, but it reads like he suddenly discovered, surprised, that cities are entertaining, specially to young people. He also seems the most normal of the cast (the disparity of his normalcy and Ed''s life is funny), studying for university like he should at his age, and appreciating girls and night life and beerXD. Maybe Mei should pay him a visit now xDDDDD
It's also funny to think that he feels safe just because he's fought all sorts of weird crazy things; can't he imagine they're probably on everybody's sights just from their talent and their proximity to Mustang? has he not considered his brtoher's unparalleled magnetic attraction to trouble?XD

Stubbled!Ed is cute!! Is his stubble as golden as his father's?XD

Time to get Major Hawkeye to have another one of her

[bob_fish]

Don't apologise for the long review - so happy that you appreciated it so much. Particularly pleased to hear that you liked the portrayal of Central - I really wanted to give it some atmosphere and make it seem like a real European city. I don't know Germany so well so it's basically a more of a combination of London and a bunch of Italian and Spanish cities I like. You're right, while to some extent I thought Central might come to life a bit once Bradley's iron boot was off, so much of it is that Ed and Al actually have time to appreciate these things now. Which I loved writing, they deserve a nice cold beer after everything they've been through! But yeah, maybe they're being a wee bit complacent about the dangers of the city, though XD

Yes, I'm reading it again and looking forward to more!

[havocmangawip]

Seconding everything that Sara Rojo said!

I very much love the amalgamation of countries and cultures you have given Central and it COMPLETELY works. (Some parts of Central look a lot like parts of Madrid, Sevilla and Toledo.) That and in the anime, especially FMA:B I get the feeling it is quite a patchwork quilt of architecture/culture... etc etc ad infinitum.

Re: Yes, I'm reading it again and looking forward to more!

[bob_fish]

Funnily enough I was in Spain on holiday this summer. There's a scene next chapter that's set on Carrera del Darro in Granada, at the edge of the old Muslim quarter.

And funnily enough, yesterday I walked past a 1920s mansion block in North London that looked *exactly* the way I pictured Katie and Rebecca's apartment building. It even looked like Arakawa (or her little helpers who do the backgrounds XD) had drawn it. I even had a look at the entrances how easy it would be for an intruder to walk into the building. Snort. Lucky I look like such a model citizen.

P.S. Rebecca icon! Dude!

[enemytosleep]

I didn't know if I should leave a comment or not when this first went up, but now that it's been up I feel bad for not doing so. It's about time that I gave my fairy-god-story-child some comment love. So I apologize for the late comment, though you know I love this story already.

I love the life you've breathed into this city, and into the characters (particularly Rebecca in this chapter). You have a great character voice and a great sense of humor. I can't wait for the next chapters for the Roy/Ed UST to develop (among the many other things discussed that I'm excited for!).

Hope your holiday is a fun one with good weather!

[bob_fish]

No apologies necessary! It's been particularly nice to hear from people about the city, which I wanted to give a lot of atmosphere to, and Rebecca, who's such a minor character I wasn't sure how easy it would be to sell people on her POV.

On to the blistering sexual tension!