156. The Wrong Prince Charming - StarryRavenFire
Note - Here is the last Halloween fanfic
Title: The Wrong Prince Charming
Name: Ichigo Kurosaki and Inoue Orihime
Stuthor: StarryRavenFire
Rating: Ganju
Pairings: Ichigo/Orihime
Appearance: They are dressed up in mascaraed costumes. Anyone want to guess what Uryu and Ichigo are dressed up on.
Background: Uryu and Orihime are going to the mascaraed together and Ichigo randomly shows up.
Sue Qualifications: Well, the fanfic is rather nice compared to the others I tend to feature. Except... during the Winter War, Orihime “went off into battle and assisted her friends with healing as well as a few attack moves.” Ichigo gets worried about Orihime's spine despite the fact he is supposed to have studied medical stuff in England and I know very well there should be no reason he should be worried. He also doesn't tell Orihime he isn't Ishida, and Orihime can't recognize that it isn't Uryu, despite the fact she makes the comment that his hair is a bit short. Ichigo is then gushing romantic prose. It is still a good story though... it is just... not Ichigo.
Annoying Attributes: To quote the author's note here “Also, I think people act ooc whenever they're in a close proximity of the person they like. Sooooooo if Ichigo seems ooc, blame his hormones or whatever.” I much prefer this comment they made, “Besides, he's hard for me to get in character so don't hate!” The second I fell is the real reason Ichigo is ooc in this, because I know for a fact that this conception this writer has, it is a MAJOR misconception that Suethors have. (And I've got to use this one on my troll account sometime.) I mean, look at Orihime. She ACTS the same way she does when she is around Ichigo, to when she is not. So no, this argument REALLY doesn't fly.
Sample:
Orihime's face was hot and probably red because she'd just said personal things to a stranger and kissed him! "I'm sorry," she whispered to both Ishida and the stranger. "I thought you were my friend. Gomen!" she bowed down apologetically.
"No, Inoue-san, you don't need to apologize to him. He's the creep for tricking you! He doesn't even look like me!" Ishida's expression showed that he was really angry. Orihime felt even worse and just wanted to grab Ishida- kun's hand and leave the stranger alone.
The fake 'Prince Charming' just shook his head and took a step toward Orihime only to be stopped by Ishida who blocked his way. "Don't get near her."
"It's okay, Ishida-kun," Orihime looked at the stranger and tried to smile at him. "Don't be sorry, I'm sure it was a mistake in your par-" She couldn't finish because she was pushed by a couple that were dancing a very upbeat song. The fall wouldn't have been that bad if it hadn't been for Ishida who immediately tried to go to her and stop her from falling only to have him trip and push her over the short railing.
Swiftly, the fake Ishida ran towards the edge and grabbed Orihime's hand to keep her from falling to the ground. Suspended in air and frightened, Orihime bit her tongue to keep her from shouting and looked up at her savior right when his mask slid off. Even though the moon light wasn't that strong she could still make out the strangers face.
Her eyes widened and her heart nearly stopped. "K-Kurosaki-kun…?" Was this what she was seeing or was someone playing a cruel trick on her?
"Inoue," Ichigo tried to smile but the situation they were in at the moment wasn't one to smile about.
His voice! It had been so long since she last heard it and it sounded so beautiful! Her eyes teared up and she didn't care what situation she was in at the moment because Ichigo was there.
"Kurosaki! What are you doing? Pull her up already!" Ishida appeared beside Ichigo and stared down at Orihime. "Inoue-san! Hold on tight, we'll get you up."
"O-Okay," Orihime said, keeping her gaze fixated on Ichigo. After five years he was right here, holding her hand and looking into her eyes. Even though they were both hanging for their lives, but feeling Ichigo and seeing him was just much more important than anything else.
Her brown eyes widened and her heart began accelerating really fast when she felt her hand slip from his. With her right hand, that was just hanging there, she shot it up and tried to get a hold of his arm to keep her from sliding out of his grip. But gravity won and pulled her down and away from Ichigo. She opened her mouth but no scream would come and all she could see was Ichigo getting farther and farther away. Orihime blinked and found that he was gone. She felt foolish and scolded her brain for playing that trick on her. How could Ichigo be here in this masquerade? She closed her eyes and waited for her back to hit the ground so she could have an excuse to cry.
Her falling finally stopped but it wasn't due to the ground. Quickly, she opened her eyes and her stomach did a flip when her gaze landed on Ichigo's. He was standing there holding her bridal style with a worried expression on his face.
"K-Kurosaki-kun…" It came out in a whisper and Orihime couldn't stop her hand as it went up to gently caress his cheek. "It's really you!" Her arms went around his neck and she buried her face in his neck and cried.
"Kurosaki! What did you do to her!" Ishida came running out from the sliding doors and glared at the substitute Shinigami. "Why is Inoue-san crying?" Even though he asked the question, the Quincy had a clear idea why she was crying.
"Inoue! I'm sorry, I didn't mean to scare you." Carefully, he put her down on her feet. Placing one of his hands on her shoulder and placing the other one under her chin, he slowly lifted her face up and leaned in.
The girl's eyes were wide in shock and she almost stepped back but her legs kept her rooted to the ground. It was a good thing she didn't step back or else she would have missed the kiss Ichigo had leaned in to give her. His lips were so soft and the kiss just sent her to heaven! Finally! She cried in her mind, as her eyes fluttered to a close and she kissed him back.
"Inoue! Are you alright! Inoue!"
"Inoue-san! You jerk! How could you let her go?"
"Me a jerk? You're the one that pushed her over the rail! It's your fault!"
"If you hadn't tricked her, this would not have happened!"
Orihime opened her eyes and found that she was on her back while Ichigo and Uryuu were both arguing on top of her. What had happened? She wondered, as she tried to sit up but only to stop due to the pain in her back.
"Itai!" What had happened?
"Inoue-san! Don't try to sit up! Here, I'll help you lay back down." Ishida kneeled down, making the metal in his suit squeak and clank together, and helped her lay back on the soft grass.
Ichigo also kneeled down, his suit making the same noise as well, and kept his gaze on the girl's face. "Don't move, Inoue, there is a chance that you might have fractured your back. You fell quite hard." He looked up at Ishida and glared at him before his look softened when he looked at her.
Uryuu shook his head. "Inoue-san, Kurosaki let you slip from his hand and you fell hard onto the ground! You were out for a good five minutes. Good thing Kurosaki was here to check up on you and make sure nothing serious happened to you."
"Eh?" She quickly sat up, ignoring the stab of pain in her back. "Kurosaki-kun touched me!"
"Inoue! Lay back down! You could damage your spine!" Ichigo placed one of his arms on her shoulder and gently pushed her back down onto the ground. "I've called my father and he's bringing the car to take you to the clinic."