Don't make it last very long. Ladies don't like that.
So, I’m trying to get back into the swing of writing again and am having some issues getting into it because every sentence I write looks cheesy/stupid/blah/insert-your-own-word-for-my-neuroses-here. My normal solution to this angst is 1) re-reading fic from other people that is awesome and therefore inspiring or 2) watching lots of LOST to get the
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When he opens his eyes, she's staring right back at him, her eyes bright and clear and amazingly blue. Looking at her like that is just too much for him, so he shifts his gaze, sees his fingers threaded through Juliet’s blonde, blonde hair, how it looks so soft and pale against his calloused skin, and, Christ, it’s just.
Sawyer closes his eyes again, concentrating on how she feels against his, remembering how she looked in that blue dress, the way she smiled at him all afternoon, how she kept holding his hand all through the reception, and his breath hitches in his chest and he’s coming, hips jerking against hers erratically.
It takes a little while before he's able to carry her over to the bed. His whole body feels relaxed and boneless and his head is still kind of cloudy from whatever he drank earlier.
He keeps running his hands through Juliet's hair, even though she's gone boneless and limp next to him, like she's already passed out. He feels like he should say something to her-something about how pretty she looked today, how amazing she is, how great she feels pressed up against him like this-something that will make her know he knows how lucky he is that she's with him.
“Juliet,” he whispers, worried she’s already fallen asleep. But she opens her eyes, looking right at him in that way she has, like he’s the only thing in her whole world. And, fuck, he can’t even think of what he wants to say anymore, this feeling hitting him like this is all just too much, more than he ever really expected, way more than he really deserves. He feels his breath catch in his throat.
“I love you,” he says and she smiles at him like it’s the first time, like she can never hear it enough, and he wonders what he’s going to have to do to really make her believe him.
“I love you, too,” she says. Her head is pressed against his chest and he wonders how loud his heartbeat sounds to her. She sighs and he runs his hand lightly down her back, feeling the ridges of her spine, the way she fits so perfect when she’s pressed up against him.
Maybe it is just because I'm a sucker for S/J smut but this was unbelievable. This scene was incredibly intense. I liked the physical interaction between them A LOT but I like how you always insert how much James really REALLY loves her. He loves her so much that it's so deep inside him. Your Juliet is very reserved at times, kind of quiet which reminds me of how distant she was with Jack at the very beginning. She doesn't really want to give all of herself to him but she slowly does. Kind of how when she told him she loved him and when he said nothing...it kind of broke her a bit. I liked how you had James finally confess how much he loved her on New Year's Eve (which is another favorite of mine). I just thought the description you gave in this passage was so vivid, that it was like watching an episode.
I just can't even when it comes to Jack and Juliet. I just wanted all the suffering from the quad to be over. I wanted Jack with Juliet and Sawyer with Kate so we could finally MOVE ON! But then Juliet kissed Jack and something was off there. I thought it was because Kate was watching. But then five minutes later, when Jack confessed that he loved Kate. Yuck! I want to punch Jack in the throat. I just had really given up on Juliet finding love until they put her with Sawyer. It was amazing, shocking, sweet and shocking. LOL. I do have to admit that Jack and Juliet were so cute in "The End". And David was the perfect combination of both characters. I just don't know what to make about David. I don't think Jack and Juliet were ever married and they surely did NOT have sex judging by that on island kiss. I can't even. I hate that we didn't see Juliet's reaction to David not being real. I don't like that they were all dead either. I still struggle with that.
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This is pretty much how I felt too! I was like, eh, at least Jack/Juliet will mean that the damn triangle is over and then they'll stop all the Jack/Kate/Sawyer drama. But then the kisses were SO BAD AND AWKWARD and I couldn't deal with that. (Although, I did think they were kind of sweet in "The End." Probably because they didn't have to kiss or pretend to be attracted to each other.)
Okay, commentary time!
This passage is basically an illustration of my complete and utter inability to write angst-free fluff featuring these two. Poor Sawyer’s just completely in love with Juliet, but he’s got no real idea how to handle a lot of their relationship. He doesn’t know what to say to her or how to say it, which to me makes sense because he’s never really been in an honest relationship before. So there’s always this part of him that second guesses his impulses-should he tell her these things he loves about her, or will she just think it sounds like he’s trying too hard, like he’s trying to con her-and the end result is that Juliet’s not confident in how he feels about her. I like using Sawyer’s POV for this story because s5 focused much more on Juliet’s feelings and insecurities. And while lot of stuff in s6 made up for that-particularly in “What Kate Does” with the ring-for most of s5, Sawyer’s feelings aren’t really shown clearly. They're always shown through the veil of Juliet's doubts.
So I’m kind of working with that here, showing that Sawyer DOES love Juliet that much-enough that he only wants to be with her, enough that he legitimately can’t believe how much he cares about her-but that he’s not very good at expressing that. And, instead of talking about it, Sawyer concentrates on the feel of it, which to him is just as important.
In The Dharma Years, I thought it was really key to have this kind of paradox in their relationship where they were closer to each other than they’d ever really been to anyone, but that there were just a lot of things that they avoided talking about altogether. And that comes to a head later in the chapter with their confrontation over the Hydra and Juliet tasering him and her still having this huge amount of insecurity over his relationship with Kate (and, I mean, she pretty much watched the cage sex happen; that’s got to be a tough thing to have in her mind), but even then they don’t actually talk all that much about it. They yell at each other and then it’s over. Except for all the ways it’s not.
And now they’re just hanging out getting drunk on the porch, both of them trying not to be the one who messes up their relationship by actually having a discussion about their issues. Which, of course, is the thing that’s ACTUALLY going to fuck up their relationship once the O6 return.
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