The Fire of the Sun -- Chapter One

[audreyii_fic]

Title: The Fire of the Sun
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: T
Characters: Full cast (Jacob/Bella, Sam/Emily)
Genre: Romance/Angst/Wolfpack!Humor
Warnings: Language, violence, and references to adult behavior. (Click here for more details.)

Comments

[likexaxdove]

You know, I should probably finish MotE before jumping onto this, but whatever. I read this and enjoyed it dammit.

Bella voice was well done but not Meyer-like-insufferable, and I chalk that up to your epicness. Jessica and Charlie were both full of win and I hope we see a lot of Jessica. Bella needs a smart and logical female friend. As much as I do love Leah, there's baggage and issues there.

Your writing continues to be delightful, flawless, amazing, etc.

I'm going to try to keep up with this one, really really gonna try. And maybe go back and finish MotE in the process. I'm a bad audreyii_fic fan, but alas...

[audreyii_fic]

Wow, glad you liked even though you didn't finish MotE! That's totally fine, I'm just impressed that you figured out what the fuck was going on :D Admittedly I tried to work in lots of "new novel in series"-esque recapping, but still.

Jessica is love. I'm so excited to get a chance to play with her.

If you don't keep up that's totally fine... especially if you're using your free time to DO THE SUNLIGHT FIC. I'M DYING OVER HERE, WOMAN!

[lsjcandy]

especially if you're using your free time to DO THE SUNLIGHT FIC. I'M DYING OVER HERE, WOMAN!

EXCUSE ME?! Did I know about this? When are you gonna finish it? It's not good to leave her dying like that, you both have a fic to write.

[lulu_honey]

"You were saying 'don't', Bella," he said quietly.

The return of Charlie Swan, Chief of Awesome.

... and apparent contortionist.

My mind just did dirty things.

Jessica grinned again. "It's my commanding presence," she said with false haughtiness. "And the breasts."

"Parenthetically, I possess breasts." THE PRODUCERS OF TWILIGHT WOULD LIKE TO REMIND YOU THAT BREASTS EXIST.

Jessica was SPOT ON. It all flowed so well and Kendrick would have nailed it, 'cause she's awesome like that. I really like seeing Bella in a natural setting like school or Newton's. Its nice to see a person who gets thrown into the supernatural have to kill time with the mundanes, just to remind us that the "special" world is still special to them too.

which stopped Alice from claiming the seat.

Ha! Take that you annoying plot device disguised as a character.

Great job! I can't wait for next week :)

[audreyii_fic]

My love for Charlie continues to know no bounds... and man, my mind didn't go dirty places with the contortionist thing, but now... I may need a minute.

"Parenthetically, I possess breasts." THE PRODUCERS OF TWILIGHT WOULD LIKE TO REMIND YOU THAT BREASTS EXIST.

Don't think for a moment that that wasn't EXACTLY what I was thinking ;) God, I've seen the Rifftrax a dozen times and it will NEVER stop being funny.

I'm glad you liked Jessica :) And yeah, I like Bella in normal situations, too. When she's only with the supernatural, the supernatural loses it's... um... supernaturalness. (I'm tired.) Bella should never have felt as comfortable in either world as Meyer made her. In my opinion, anyhow.

Anyway, glad you're liking! I hope everyone adjusts to the weekly update thing okay. I just can't turn out these chapters (which are clocking at 7k+ words apiece) every three days. I'll die.

[lulu_honey]

God, I've seen the Rifftrax a dozen times and it will NEVER stop being funny.

I know exactly what you mean. The Google search part is my favorite ("Who wants the first slice of birthday man?!" lol). The unfortunate thing is that I can't look at Kellen Lutz now without "Hellooooooooo, doin' your sister."

Bella should never have felt as comfortable in either world as Meyer made her.

But don't ya know? Bella was meant to be a vampire. Ugh. *vomits a little*

Weekly updates are fine babe, it will help you retain your sanity. I found that with MoE I wasn't even done mentally processing a chapter and you'd posted the next one. This will give us all a bit more thinking space.

[audreyii_fic]

See, and I just hear "Emmett: the 'Dude' vampire."

I never thought about thinking space. I guess it never occurred to me that people would actually be absorbing... huh. Well, that'll be a bright side to less speedy updates, I suppose...

[tunde_tre]

You may not consciously know the answer to your own question about Bella-voice, but let me tell you one thing: you are succeeding, cos you know Meyer-voice (suffered from it enough to recognize it) and just "eliminating" it you're getting Bella-voice.
And i'm so very thankful about you writing Charlie actually acting like a dad and not a decorative figure in a story.
As dark this story may become, i'm eagerly waiting for each chapter to unfold and reveal something in a new light!
Great work, as always.

[audreyii_fic]

Oh, good, good to know :) They Meyer-voice is insidious and I now have trouble distinguishing it in certain situations. I think I just scarred over that part of my brain.

And Charlie should've acted like a damn father in the book. *snorgles Charlie*

[greeneyed_me]

Okay...so honest story here-

I was checking this past week to see if there was any chance you'd posted another story or drabble series here lately. I kept checking and didn't see anything, figuring you'd taken a much much neeeeded break.

Then I saw this and literally screamed "YESSS!!!"

My boyfriend walks in, sees the SOB banner, shakes his head and asks "Is it that chick that writes the Jacob stories?"

I said "Yeah....how'd you know?"

He says "You mentioned something about looking for new stuff by her sometime last night." I sit there, dumbfounded because I don't remember the conversation.

He laughed and said "Oh yeah and it was about 3am when you said it."

I WAS TALKING ABOUT THIS IN MY EFFING SLEEP. This is why I needed this. Edward's creeptacular effect on Bella?

Pish posh. That's nothing compared to your writing/stories and their collective effect on my happy J/B brain.

So needless to say...I am quite happy you've written a sequel even though I loved the end of TMOTE. : )

[audreyii_fic]

Okay, you need to know that I CRACKED THE FUCK UP while I was reading this. Then I showed it to the husband. He blinked and went back to his Dungeons and Dragons book. We all have our dirty little habits.

Anyway, glad to be bringing you such pleasure :) My apologies to your boyfriend if you're waking him up at night!

[greeneyed_me]

Lmao. It really is a small world. But yes I cracked up when he told me that I told him that in my sleep.
I'm just glad you don't disappoint when it comes to updates....unlike me. I had two WIPs that were started in 2009 and 2010...yet to be finished.

And since I've got until June for season 4 of True Blood to come out... I need other things to get addicted to haha.

[greeneyed_me]

This is so funny. My husband calls her the " woman who writes the stories" and he knows when she posts something new because I start giggling or screaming. Small world.

[anonymous]

I really like your Jessica - especially the 'chicks before dicks' comment!

As for how to write a Meyer-less Bella - simply give other people not connected to the supernatural community a chance i.e the Lunch-Table Crowd and, more importantly, her own father. Who knows, maybe she could start treating him like her parent and less like a room-mate? Just saying, LOL!

But, that's wishful thinking, I know.

Cara (to lazy to log-in)

[audreyii_fic]

Jessica -- by which I mean Anna Kendrick -- is win. Just like Charlie -- by which I mean Billy Burke -- is win. (As I typed that my mind almost went to a scary shipper place. Dear God. I'm going to back away slowly now.)

And hey, it's not wishful thinking! Bella experienced growth in the last fic! She and Charlie are doing way better now :D