bumblebees. re: akame.
bumblebees.
akame.
6,100 words.
16½ pages.
soundtrack: 'still believe' and 'sad song' by kim jung hoon. soft and melodic instrumentals.
( It was a sunny day in Anaheim, California. )
akame.
6,100 words.
16½ pages.
soundtrack: 'still believe' and 'sad song' by kim jung hoon. soft and melodic instrumentals.
( It was a sunny day in Anaheim, California. )
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................ ok GET READY FOR THE LONGEST COMMENT YOU'LL EVER RECEIVE IN YOUR LIFE.
He had to find himself, that part he lost 7 months ago, that part that was pulled away bit by bit like a loose thread at the edge of his sweater until suddenly it had all gone and he was as bare as he hoped he’d never be.
asflkjada NICE METAPHOR THERE ugh I love your writing style!
And all at once, against his will, Kamenashi Kazuya - calm, collected, refined Kamenashi Kazuya - broke like the thin skin of a budded flower and burst into a fit of deep sobs and quiet, strange, animal-like wails that were stifled against the dark skin of the man he was leaning against in the tiny little complex doorway.
awwwww )''': I love it when Kame bursts into tears ♥333333
“Kamenashi? Are you okay?”STOP CALLING HIM KAMENASHI YOU TOOL GOD CAN'T YOU SEE THAT JUST THE MERE SIGHT OF YOU ( ... )
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ahahaha slkfjg I found that entirely amusing. but I kind of imagined Jin using the paper with the dotted lines where you write huge-ass letters and-- okay why am I giggling so much this is angsty PUT ON YOUR ANGSTY HAT. *huff*
Jin rushed forward and squeezed Kame tightly against his own body - and all it took was the hot breath against Kame’s earlobe and neck, the vibration of Jin’s tiny, repressed sob coursing through his tiny frame, and the barely audible whisper of, “Oh, Kame…” before Kame felt a fire rekindled from the depths of his belly and a wanting that was pleasantly, innocently satisfied by the pressure of Jin’s deep, solid hips against his groin.
........... wait nvm TAKING OFF THE ANGSTY HAT :DDD??
But the Hallmark moment passed the second Jin’s soft hands found their way to Kame’s belt buckle.
LMFAO how did I know that was going to happen. oh Jin.
“Kame!” Jin laughed, his hand grazing against what felt like a tiny prickling scar, “What have you been sleeping in, raspberry bushes ( ... )
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Kame waited for it.
Those words he didn’t want to hear. The gentle, willowy breeze that blew in through his window carrying a world full of broken pieces he couldn’t fix raining down around him.
ok so I was feeling the angst and everything and then after this I just imagined Jin bursting out in an English accent "I. QUIT. MAGIC." and started snickering madly. skfjalksfag. omg I AM SORRY FOR BEING WAY TO HAPPY READING THIS FIC BUT I'M JUST SO HAPPY IT'S HERE THAT I. *breathe.* OKAY OBVIOUSLY THIS ANGSTY HAT ISN'T DOING VERY MUCH FOR ME.
“Well, I’m glad you listened. And I’m glad you told me to go. I really, really am. I can’t wait to get out of here, to start over, to sleep…oh god, fucking SLEEP, Kame. SLEEP. I was so scared, you know, such a big risk, but then you talked me into it, Kame, and I was so happy for once…”
YOU WHAT-- skfajlskd aww Kame ;___;
“You can say how great it was working on Gokusen 2 together, maybe.”
PUNCHES JIN IN THE FACE
“Never ( ... )
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Kame walked into the bathroom, sat in the shower and texted Yamapi. “We should go out to lunch sometime when I get back. Miss you.” He buried his head in his arms, listening to the dull hum of the empty house, and cried. *sniffles*
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Thank you for reading! ♥
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Akanishi Jin rested his hand lovingly against the small of Kame’s back and led him into the dim apartment. “Come in, please.”
The cold response was maddening,
huu... Isn't a loving gesture not cold? O_o
OKOK
THIS WAS REALLY THICK WRITING. SO UHM, JUST TO MAKE SURE I UNDERSTOOD THE CHARACTERS PROPERLY?
To put it simply:
Kame... misses Jin.. annndd they broke up a year an a half ago. How come he only started losing himself seven months ago? And he gives up on Jin at the end?! (That's what the quotation implies =\)
Jin isn't taking the relationship that Kame wants seriously. And why is it that, although he's adamant/sure about not returning to JE, that he says that the break will only be for 6 months/a year?
And Yamapi hits on Kame.
It's never too late to be who you might have been.
Fits Jin, who has such strong aspirations, and free will, very well, I think.
And also <3 your Kame characterization. ( ... )
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It's a cold response because here's Kame, just collapsing in Jin's arms, sobbing, wailing, clutching him helplessly and all he gets is a, "Come in, please." It's a tender gesture, but he's expecting more like a, "Kame, Kame! Are you alright? Shhhh shhhh, it's okay, it's okay baby..." etc. Jin is usually such a warm, caring person. So the way he just led Kame into his apartment with a "Come in" is more polite/obligatory than anything.
He only started losing himself because even though they "broke up" per se, Jin was still there, still in KAT-TUN, still in the concerts, still in the TV shows and the studios, etc. Still accessible. Maybe things weren't right, and maybe he couldn't "be" with him, but at 24HRTV Kame said, "Even though we have our fights [etc]...Akanishi is the one I go to for help, and he to me." They weren't as close but Kame never felt altogether that alone. When Jin left for L.A., he was. He had to carry on shows, singles, an album, "by himself", ( ... )
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...Is that your primary genre D; (and is that a threesome fic?)
Thanks for the quick reply. =)
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This was SUCH a good fic! ♥
It was cute and sad and touching and-- *_*;
You write Kame so so so well. I think you captured his emotions wonderfully~
ARGH Jin why why why do you have to be such a man.
That ending was horrible and wonderful at the same time.
And Yamapi. Yamapi shouldnt have made me laugh so much in this fic xD
SEQUEL PLEASE.
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Kame is so hard to write. In the concerts he's always so bouncy and happy and playful and outgoing, but once you take him out of that atmosphere and stick him in a regular situation, he's so quiet and lonely and thoughtful and masochistic, almost. He's too hard on himself. I find his character fascinating, and it took me a loooooooong time to make sure that I had him down pretty well in writing, so I am really really glad you thought it suited him.
Jin is dumb. Very, very dumb. He needs a gigantic kick to the face for being such a jerk, but it's not altogether his fault, either. Kame is just as bad about playing things off and pretending, too. *KICKS THEM BOTH*
Yep, sequel to come. Thank you for reading! ♥
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second, this is a really good story. I like your discriptions, very well done.
the end seemed a bit rushed. A bit incomplete. Perhaps it's because I don't think that jin would just run out like that. for some reason I can see the next thing happening would be Kame jumping off the golden gate bridge.
write a sequel or something please :)
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Thank you for reading! ♥
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