Personal Statement Strategy....
I am writing a personal statement for application to a Chem PhD program. My application is not a shoe-in by any stretch of the imagination (especially since the two schools to which I am applying are in the top 5/10). I have strengths and weaknesses like everyone, so I am hoping to highlight my strengths and mitigate my weaknesses. Here is some background. Undergrad GPA (at an small overcompensating liberal arts university): 3.1 (lower in subject), Masters GPA (at a larger state university): 3.7; GRE V:490 Q:700 a:4.5. I have worked full time in the research industry while pursuing my MS. My thesis work will likely be patented, and then lead to my degree. I have collaborated with recognized "leaders in the field" at work, thus my recommendations are pretty strong, also (not sure how much this counts for, but) the company I work for funds many of those doing research in the departments in which I am applying. So, in short my strengths are: significant research experience, glowing recommendations (by known "players"), MS GPA cancels out undergrad GPA(?)... My weaknesses are: no big name undergrad ("so *where* is blank university"?), and poor marks there, unimpressive GRE scores (both general and subject).
So if you are still awake, I think that my written sections (research SOP and PS)are going to be the weight that will tip the scales either direction. So how do i approach my personal statement for said university, keeping strategery (or strategy) in mind. Both programs to which I applied provide funding but the graduate program said that my response to the statement below will "be used to determine your suitability for specific fellowships and enhance our understanding of the personal reasons that have driven you towards the Chemistry Doctoral Program".
So here is the prompt:
How have your background and life experiences, including cultural, geographical, financial, educational or other opportunities or challenges, motivated your decision to pursue a graduate degree at this school?
For example, if you grew up in a community where educational, cultural, or other opportunities were either especially plentiful or especially lacking, you might discuss the impact this had on your development and interests. This should be a discussion of the journey that has led to your decision to seek a graduate degree.
Any idea on either what to or what not to do? I am particularly in need of advice for a passionate hook that is not cliché or too "marshmallow"
I intend to keep it pretty conversational/discussion based, but still objective, with reasons and examples, and conclude that the best step for me now is to finish their PhD program based on my reasons and examples...