SOP take 2

[royalneptune]

Okay so, after last time I pretty much deleted everything and started over again.

For the sake of background info, I'm applying to MFA programs. Right now my SOP is WAY too short for two of the schools requirements, and okay for three. So any suggestions to make the thing longer would be welcome.

Thanks guys.

Comments

[adequaticus]

I'm science/engineering, so feel free to tell me I'm way off here

[royalneptune]

Calling me a bad writer wasn't necessary.

[adequaticus]

I said you do not excel at it. That is definitely not the equivalent of saying you are bad at it.

[adequaticus]

Perhaps it wasn't necessary. Adequaticus is being is his usual harsh self. However, though you might dislike his evaluation, you shouldn't discount his critique. I often disagree with him, but here, his comments are piercingly accurate and thorough. This isn't yet a strong statement.

[royalneptune]

I'm not sensitive at ALL when it comes to my work. If I am feeling sensitive now it's only because of mounting deadlines and the fact that I SUCK at writing formal essays and I know it so it's making me feel a bit vulnerable.

Also, yeah, he's being a dick.

[adequaticus]

:(

[royalneptune]

Well, man, you are. Honestly, I have NO issue with your complaints about my word usage and stuff like that. I need to cut things and I knew this draft was far from perfect. I think, however, a little tact in the future would be nice. Calling me juvenile and saying I don't excel at anything wasn't fun to hear, you know? This process is stressing me the fuck out and maybe I'm a little vulnerable right now and taking it out on you but...yeah, I didn't need that and it really didn't need ot be said.

I will admit, though, you did have a fair amount of good points.

[adequaticus]

I said certain sentences were juvenile, not you. I know nothing about you.

Some people like tact, some people don't. I cater to the latter crowd.

I said, from the evidence I have, you don't excel at writing. That is not saying you don't excel at ANYTHING. Maybe I'd take that back if I saw a fiction piece you wrote. You know your skills far better than I.

Please, if the simple task of applying to grad school stresses you out, you're in for trouble. I think your *procrastination* is stressing you out, not the process. You put this on yourself.

Feel free to take out your frustration on me. I'm enjoying the dialogue as I shiver in bed.

[ryf]

Calling me juvenile and saying I don't excel at anything wasn't fun to hear, you know?

He never said such things. You wanted criticism and you got his impression of how the essay sounds to an outsider. Now change it so it doesn't sound like that.