Comments | amific: Fic: Leavenworth, SGA, NC-17, McKay/Sheppard (2/2)

amific

Fic: Leavenworth, SGA, NC-17, McKay/Sheppard (2/2)

Jan 19, 2006 20:13

Leavenworth Part 2. You can find the headers and part 1 here.

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everagaby January 20 2006, 01:46:11 UTC

Ami, stop biting your nails; the smut is UNBELIVABLY HOT, and the story as a whole is goooood, damn good. Your nails don't deserve said abuse over something as kickass as this.
Now sit back, chill with Rodney, the Cranky Turtle, and bask in the glow of FINISHED FIC.

(In case you haven't guessed by now, this story is goooood and yea, verily, I heart it.)

amireal January 20 2006, 02:00:14 UTC

Wench.

everagaby January 20 2006, 02:10:01 UTC

Don't make me take the turtle away.

margueritem January 20 2006, 01:55:06 UTC

Who's brilliant idea

Whose, please. :) *goes back to reading*

amireal January 20 2006, 01:59:25 UTC

Eep! Well so far that's one. So it's cool. I also got one more while I was there. The evil Let's. Rar.

margueritem January 20 2006, 01:58:11 UTC

"Not a good time to ask that question Rodney."

In this kind of sentence, shouldn't there be a comma before Rodney?

amireal January 20 2006, 02:01:31 UTC

It's a little bit of an either or.

margueritem January 20 2006, 02:04:26 UTC

Is it? Well, English isn't my native language and I don't have a grammar book.

Still, I need to point this one out, too, even if it's of the same kind :

"I'm sorry gentlemen,"

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margueritem January 20 2006, 02:02:22 UTC

"What can I say?" John smiles, finally looking up, "I'm that good."

No comma after up, me thinks.

margueritem January 20 2006, 02:18:50 UTC

I don't believe in coincidences," John reaches for their bag of loot off to his left. Here, too. No comma after coincidences, no?

fairestcat January 20 2006, 02:27:43 UTC

Actually both of these are a stylistic choice.

The first is two sentences:

"What can I say?" [end sentence] John smiles, finally looking up, "I'm that good."

Now, it could be What can I say?" John smiles, finally looking up. [end sentence] "I'm that good.. but it does in fact work both ways.

And either way, there has to be a comma or other punctutation mark at the junction between the dialogue and description. In either case merely removing the comma and not replacing it with something else would be wrong.

margueritem January 20 2006, 02:28:58 UTC

Right, I should have mentionned : add period. :D

I thought a comma in such sentences was to be used with verbs such as to ask, to say, to inform, etc.

bluebrocade January 20 2006, 02:22:02 UTC

Yay! Loved it!

amireal January 20 2006, 02:42:07 UTC

YAY! *throws confetti*