Comments | alizep: The Obsession

alizep

The Obsession

Dec 28, 2009 21:26

( He knew that his fate would be once again sealed by the unwitting actions of his Prince. )

sm_monthly, beryl, endymion, theme_mamoru, sailormoon, kunzite

Comments 9

jenbunny December 29 2009, 04:10:29 UTC

I ... I'm not sure how I feel ^^;; Obviously I loved it. It was very well written and I really loved the descriptions and well everything, but Endy :( that makes me sad ... other then that I loved it ^^

alizep January 5 2010, 02:43:41 UTC

It was a bit darker than I normally write. Thank you for commenting!

lovelylytton December 29 2009, 09:31:27 UTC

Wow, this is dark!ship heaven! Serenity/Endymion (dark because she's dead and he cried), Beryl/Endymion (empty puppet sex), and Kunzite/+unidentified new queen (evil evil evil), all in one neat sinister package. You've detailed the loss of what makes Endymion Endymion so well that the evil was almost tangible (*shudders*), and Kunzite killing him was almost an act of mercy, not that the shitennou would have seen it as such.

But one question here: the new queen, the lover Kunzite cannot bear to share. Who is it? Still Beryl? Venus? I'd say it's Venus because of this: It was the golden beauty that had became consumed by the ever increasing darkness that ended the bloody reign of the red headed witch.

alizep January 5 2010, 02:45:16 UTC

Kunzite killing him was almost an act of mercy, not that the shitennou would have seen it as such.
Exactly! He was acting more out of vengence and anger than anything else. Although for Endymion to become that way, it is only fitting.

And yes it is Venus. :)

sugarcross December 29 2009, 13:49:03 UTC

I loved the first version, but this edited one is more potent and deliciously dark! Well done, Alize, what a wonderful revision. I needed something sinister to feed my crazy muse in order to finish your present ;)

alizep January 5 2010, 02:46:21 UTC

I'm glad you liked it! I couldn't have done this without your wonderful help (and the motivation of my drool-worthy gift)!

charliechaplin2 December 29 2009, 16:35:30 UTC

Holy McVities biscuits that's fantastic! The tone is enough to send you intoo a dark spiral of despair but the plot itself is just...woah. I pity them all, excpet Beryl because she was just a selfish cow. Endymion has become a non-entity, labelled 'sex-puppet for anyone going' and despite being the King of Earth, he's nothing now. That's so sad, especially since that and Kunzite's corruption has lead to him no longer respecting the man he's given his soul for.
And then the twist of Venus going all evilly too...TWISTY ALIZEP!!!! It's almost a little reprieve that Kunz kills Endy for her, he may have become a monster, but at least that jealousy was formed from some kind of remenant of love for her.

All so very sad....

alizep January 5 2010, 02:48:08 UTC

I pity them all, excpet Beryl because she was just a selfish cow.
I enjoyed this part of your comment most of all. :)

I'm glad you liked it. Now I have to write some happy-smutty-drabble to counter all of this darkness....

venusorbit1 January 5 2010, 08:32:14 UTC

Alize this is awesome. I love when you go dark, but only in small doses because it so profoundly effects me that I get all emo for a while afterwards.

This is fucking fratricide right there. I love this.