[Critique Me] Kinesthetic tetrameter
Yesterday I noticed something
Weird while riding on a bus.
I was sitting on the port side,
Facing toward the center aisle.
Then I turned my head to forward,
Watching where the bus was going,
Watching us approach a turning,
Rightward, leftward, of the road.
I anticipated feeling
Pressure to the side, result of
Good old centrifugal forces.
But there was a catch. I thought I'd
Lean toward my body's left or
Right, which corresponded to
The bus' fore or aft direction,
Not its real left or right.
When at last we reached the turning,
I was weirded out to feel a
Force toward my body's front or
Back, the bus' right and left.
(About the "critique me" tag: I'll use it when I post writing or other work that I invite you to criticize. That may or may not be the main point of the post. And of course you're welcome to criticize anything I put up here -- the new tag is more an encouragement than anything else.)
Weird while riding on a bus.
I was sitting on the port side,
Facing toward the center aisle.
Then I turned my head to forward,
Watching where the bus was going,
Watching us approach a turning,
Rightward, leftward, of the road.
I anticipated feeling
Pressure to the side, result of
Good old centrifugal forces.
But there was a catch. I thought I'd
Lean toward my body's left or
Right, which corresponded to
The bus' fore or aft direction,
Not its real left or right.
When at last we reached the turning,
I was weirded out to feel a
Force toward my body's front or
Back, the bus' right and left.
(About the "critique me" tag: I'll use it when I post writing or other work that I invite you to criticize. That may or may not be the main point of the post. And of course you're welcome to criticize anything I put up here -- the new tag is more an encouragement than anything else.)