NaNo Ridiculousness Chapter 8

[alien_writings]

Hey there,

Here's Chapter 8 of "I Prefer the Mind Control." I'm trying to make actual chapters now. Enjoy the ridiculousness!

Day 1, Day 2, Day 3, Day 4, Day 5(ish), Chapter 6, Chapter 7

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“This Palace of yours is the size of a small city,” I remarked. “It's fucking huge, and I am utterly lost.”

Comments

[theun4givables]

Aw maaaaan. Of course Dylan going to Zimara was going to create an interplanetary incident. Of course.

I feel bad for the both of them, really. Because Dylan just wants to live and Xan just wants Dylan to be safe. And of course Earth isn't going to let that happen, what with the Pres being all like "Bring that boy back he's ours."

I mean, really? Is that necessary? Kinda in agreement with Dylan, here. It's silly. But certainly creates drama and I like it.

Also love Preston. He amuses me. He can stay. Hopefully we'll see more of him in the future. :)

[alien_writings]

The IPRA is EXTREMELY silly and just totally ridiculous. Why does it exist? Rule of Drama, that's why! Since I am nice, I will not link the trope to the actual TV Tropes website, because that site is a Black Hole of Time and will eat your soul, destroy your mind and ruin your vocabulary.

We will definitely see more of Preston, especially if the Ridiculous Thing involving Preston's hard drive actually happens. And that will, in all likelihood, happen. If you're curious, I actually got the idea from browsing TV Tropes. That site is both brain-sucking and inspiring, haha.

[n3m3sis43]

Whoops, I forgot he had no idea that there was such a thing as the fourth wall. Was that a secret I could keep from him? I know I'm fictional, but would Xan have a breakdown if he learned he was? I didn't like when he kept secrets from me, and thus I didn't like keeping secrets from him. Shit, being aware of the fourth wall causes extra drama. I fucking hate drama. Damn you.

Lololololol this whole fucking paragraph is fucking amazing. I know you have your doubts about this story but I love it. Hi-larious.

Also this - lololol omg I'm dying:

You know what else sucks? Temporal confusion. I never know what tense to use, for some reason speaking in the present tense now yet speaking in the past when I'm narrating. You might want to fix that shit in the editing process.

Dude, I fucking hate you a little bit right now for angsting so much about your writing abilities all the time because THIS IS FUCKING BRILLIANT. I can't do this, even if I'm "magical" or whatever you say I am. Right here? This is talent, dude. Keep fucking doing

[alien_writings]

Lol, Dylan loves to talk back to me. I'm losing track of how many times he's cursed me out.

I'm glad you're enjoying my story so much! ^_^