Comments | alien_writings: Challenge #23: Things That Go Bump In the Night

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Challenge #23: Things That Go Bump In the Night

Oct 24, 2012 20:15

Title: By Candlelight
Word Count: 1,472
Rating: PG
Original/Fandom: Original
Pairings (if any): Mackenzie/Zachary
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/etc): Death
Summary: Mackenzie lights a candle on the second anniversary of Zachary's death.

( By Candlelight )

short story, hc_bingo, writerverse

Comments 5

n3m3sis42 October 25 2012, 00:48:28 UTC

I liked this. It would suck to be an afterthought at your own funeral, wouldn't it? I liked the whole concept that it was his jealousy that trapped him and his understanding that he was loved that freed him. Hopefully since Mackenzie loves him she can take comfort in the fact he's not stuck anymore and also that she was able to share her feelings? Definitely a sucky situation but I still thought this story had a really nice sweetness to it.

alien_writings October 25 2012, 02:33:47 UTC

It really WOULD suck to be an afterthought at your own funeral. The whole situation was sucky, but I'm glad you enjoyed the story and thought it was sweet.

As I was working on this, I kind of semi-consciously realized I was, yet again, trying to work out my feelings through my writing, lol.

n3m3sis42 October 25 2012, 02:41:53 UTC

I figured as much, about the feelings, from some of the stuff you've said about Brendan.

halfshellvenus October 28 2012, 02:30:41 UTC

I really liked the emotions in this, because I've seen you write anger many times before, but the grief of lost love is completely different.

It IS unfair that one twin should be forgotten while the other is so publicly mourned. People who were only friends of Allison before should at least consider that her famjily lost two children that day. and no doubt misses them equally.

There's a bittersweet irony in MacKenzie's love finally freeing Zachary, but his leaving is only absence for her and amounts to escape for him.

alien_writings October 28 2012, 13:23:42 UTC

Yay, I'm super-glad you liked the emotions in this. I tend to focus on certain emotions in my work (anger, confusion and denial being favorites), so I'm happy that I was able to successfully convey a totally different kind of feeling. Expanding my emotional writing range is something I would like to be able to do. :)