[fic] You Can't Go Back - Yugioh, YYxY, angst, PG, theme 46

[aijou_aibou]

Title: You Can't Go Back
Author: Chey (duelist_gurl163)
Theme: 46 - “Meeting you was fate, becoming your friend was choice, but falling in love with you was completely out of my control.” for 50_lovequotes
Rating: PG
Genre: Angst
Parings: YamixYugi one-sided, YugixKeiko(OC)

Archive: You're lookin' at it
Warnings: Vaguely-AU-ish since it's set rather far

Comments

[momduels]

Nooooo! Wrong couple got married. Yami and Yugi belong together not that girl. Poor Yami. I feel sad for him.

[aijou_aibou]

I know, I know...*hides from them both*

[strawberrykaoru]

Gyaaah!! Nooo, Yami, you idiot. *glares and bops him over the head* Serves you right! (Although the bit about him being a good sewer puts him in a better light...but still bad. >_>)
...
Unrequited love always hurts so much, but seeing Yugi happy is good too.

The last few paragraphs and Yami's strained smiles evoked some pretty angsty emotions, ne. ;A;
Oh, and: Yugi was the only one that had noticed Atemu in the hall -- 'who' instead of 'that' would work a bit better

[aijou_aibou]

Well you'd might as well know your picture of Yami moping over being unable to tell Yugi was the vague inspiration for this. xD;
xDD Poor Yami...first he loses his one true love and then he gets bopped over the head.

Hooray! Because they were supposed to. ^^

Ahh...I always mess that up. >.< Thanks for pointing it out. I just wish I was as good at grammar so that I could actually leave helpful comments once in a while on your fics. ^^; Plus while fixing that I found another typo. So actually you helped twice. xD

Thanks for the comment. ^_^

[strawberrykaoru]

My picture of Yami moping...OH, the one when Yuugi's sleeping? xD
I'm so mean to him. *grins* Then again I'm mean to all my muses...*voice trails off*

"*squees*" are helpful comments. :D And naw, I'm not that good at grammar, I make those kinds of mistakes too. ^^
There was a typo? I didn't see it! o_o

[duelist_gurl163]

Yep. xDD

Aw, yes, but I'd like to offer something at least a bit more substantial. ^^;
Well, actually it was a word that was missing. I missed the 'one' in "the one standing," and it just said "the standing." xD;; But it's fixed now, so it's all good. x3

[jumblebelle]

This had me wanting to cry the entire way through except when I was laughing because my dog's name is Keiko so you definitely achieved the emotional side of the fic. XD The last few paragraphs were very good, they weren't corny or over-written or anything, and the last line capped of the angst fic nicely. And the "You look happy" bit was really nice. :D Plus Yami sewing was adorable. XD

[duelist_gurl163]

xD Oops. Unintentional! Aw, thank you, I'm glad. ^_^ I appreciate that, I was worried about making it corny. ^^;

Thanks for the comment!

[aijou_aibou]

Aww...thank you! Yes...this wasn't a happy one for Yami. =/ But it's just too much fun to make him angst. However, I appreciate your comment, it lets me know that I managed to achieve what I was going for. ^_^

[kurunya]

Yami you big idiot. You didn't tell him, and that's your own fault! But I still love him ;_; Yugi isn't making things any better but what does he know? -Sigh- Poor Yami. -pats him-