Fandom: 24, for century_fox Title: Every Dark Has An Afterglow Word count: 1200 Characters: Jack/Renee Warnings: AU, spoilers for the series. Author's notes: Under the cut
I forgot all about this. My inbox is so damn crazy. I am trying to organize before school gets crazy, and I was legit like OMG. Because I almost entirely forgot I had something to post.
And now a comment for real.leigh57January 23 2012, 13:44:21 UTC
One thing I need to say, just generally about your Jack/Renee writing, is that I find it so delightful when you fulfill one of my prompts. I just DO. Because it's like ordering exactly what I want off the menu and having it show up all delicious and perfect. Yep. But more specifically!
The sun is as cheerful as everyone inside, vibrant and loud, booming with life.
I love that you can make that sound ominous, at least as it relates to Renee. It's such a perfect moment, because it's clear that for her, this whole vibrant booming thing isn't helping.
And guh, the entire thing where she doesn't have to turn around to know that it's him, and they're knocking elbows and he's the only person in the world who can make her smile right now, and they're doing the altruism Olympics again in that he'd willingly leave to make her more comfortable, but she's busting her ass to chin up and stay because it's for Jack's daughter
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Re: And now a comment for real.adrenalin211January 23 2012, 15:42:48 UTC
Holy long comment, bb! Thank you so much for taking the time to like... say all these things that you liked. You definitely didn't have to do that, especially AFTER the beta and the on-the-side encouragement
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sjhfasjkghdaoigajd!!!! Thank you so much!!! This is so lovely and you seriously have the most beautiful way of phrasing things.
GAH they're just so connected and they just GET each other and they don't even need to say anything to understand exactly how each other is feeling.
(He always finds her in any room.) PLEASE USE PARENTHESES FOREVER I WILL PAY YOU IN PINK STARBURSTS AND PUMPKIN COOKIES.
At a stoplight he reaches over and puts a hand on her knee; she bites her lip to keep from breaking, because there’s no logical explanation for knowing how much she needed that, too. <3
AND THE LAST SCENE. Renee's head in Jack's lap with his hand in her hair and then they kiss and even when she feels like she needs to get away from the rest of the world Jack is the one she wants to get close to and remove all the distance and holy fuckcakes I can't even. SO MUCH LOVE.
They ARE so perfect for each other and they make me want to keysmash, too. Like...see? ;laksdfja;sldfjasld;fkaweirw
So happy that you liked it. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. <3 P.S. awwwwwwwwwww! I do love pink Starbursts. And your pumpkin cookies. Nom nom. You don't have to pay me in them though. snort.
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You are stealthy like that, you stealthy thing that is stealthy.
And I have to go to the gym and be workin' on my fitness.
BUT. I have a lot to say about this.
p.s. Wait until you see my new desktop.
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I forgot all about this. My inbox is so damn crazy. I am trying to organize before school gets crazy, and I was legit like OMG. Because I almost entirely forgot I had something to post.
Kick ass at the gym.
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The sun is as cheerful as everyone inside, vibrant and loud, booming with life.
I love that you can make that sound ominous, at least as it relates to Renee. It's such a perfect moment, because it's clear that for her, this whole vibrant booming thing isn't helping.
And guh, the entire thing where she doesn't have to turn around to know that it's him, and they're knocking elbows and he's the only person in the world who can make her smile right now, and they're doing the altruism Olympics again in that he'd willingly leave to make her more comfortable, but she's busting her ass to chin up and stay because it's for Jack's daughter ( ... )
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Have I told you how much I love your writing?
Stephen's family is perfect. Bwah.
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Thanks for commenting.
Hahaha. Stephen's family is modeled after how my mom's side of the family can be, minus the brilliant part. True story!
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Thanks for posting.
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GAH they're just so connected and they just GET each other and they don't even need to say anything to understand exactly how each other is feeling.
(He always finds her in any room.) PLEASE USE PARENTHESES FOREVER I WILL PAY YOU IN PINK STARBURSTS AND PUMPKIN COOKIES.
At a stoplight he reaches over and puts a hand on her knee; she bites her lip to keep from breaking, because there’s no logical explanation for knowing how much she needed that, too. <3
AND THE LAST SCENE. Renee's head in Jack's lap with his hand in her hair and then they kiss and even when she feels like she needs to get away from the rest of the world Jack is the one she wants to get close to and remove all the distance and holy fuckcakes I can't even. SO MUCH LOVE.
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They ARE so perfect for each other and they make me want to keysmash, too. Like...see? ;laksdfja;sldfjasld;fkaweirw
So happy that you liked it. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
<3
P.S. awwwwwwwwwww! I do love pink Starbursts. And your pumpkin cookies. Nom nom. You don't have to pay me in them though. snort.
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