Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13caerMay 11 2009, 07:06:38 UTC
It took me a while to put into words what I was thinking. I hope it came out okay =) And let's hope this actually fits in the comment box, lol.
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There are many firsts you experienced before Mark Sloan.
Your first kiss with Andrew McKinney in grade four under the slide on the playground (an innocent peck on the cheek).
Your first real kiss with Scott Holding on your 13th birthday party (also your first boy/girl party). Then your first heartbreak on the same day, when you caught him kissing Jenny Hart.
When you were 16, you brought home your first boyfriend, Mickey Talt, who played saxophone and had the dreamiest eyes in the entire class. A year later when you’re 17, he would use those eyes to get naked with you after the Prom and would become the first boy that got to 4th base
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Re: Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13shiparkerMay 11 2009, 18:41:16 UTC
That was INCREDIBLE sweetbear. My heart is a mix of glee and I am like between tearing up and just giggling. I love love love love the progression of everything and everything you wrote about them (The facthe is the first person who saw her in months, not being rejected), the way he let her in the first time is everything plus one why I love this couple? Can I tell that I can't wipe off the smile on my face on this part?
That time you’re moving over him slowly, straddling his lap, foreheads pressed, hands joined. He takes in deep breaths, his hooded gaze fixed on you. “Lexie,” he expels on a sigh and your heart jumps, contracts, before beating rapidly because it’s the first time you’ve heard anyone say your name with such unadulterated love.
There is so much honesty and it's so incredible heartfelt. I felt just like Lexie while reading this. The sense of almost worshiping (It comes across this way) coming from Mark Sloan basically melts my icy heart. Heee! Love it!
Re: Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13caerMay 11 2009, 20:37:02 UTC
I'm not the biggest fan of endearments, but I have to admit, "sweetbear" got me grinning like an idiot XD
Anyways, I'm immensely happy you enjoyed it as much as you did! And, four Loves? Wow, that's quite a compliment! Thank you! And I'm also glad you liked the progression; I stressed over how to write this for a day and half so I'm pleased it worked out!
Glad you liked that part =) For some reason, I always equate slow sex with love for Mark in my fics.
Your 'icy heart'? Pfftt, as if you could even have one! Haha, but I'm pretty much beaming right now that your heart melted, nonetheless. I don't think anything I've written has that effect on somebody.
Thank you for all that! Your reviews are always such a pleasure to read =D Which actually makes me feel like a jerk right now, because I have yet to review yours (it's on my list, I swear!). I'll try to get to it sometime this week O_O Really!
Re: Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13littleone87May 11 2009, 19:35:38 UTC
Wow, your 2nd person is amazing. You need to keep writing in it, k?
And didn't I tell you I would love this? I love how you showed all of her firsts before Mark and with Mark, it was a wonderful paralell. This came out wonderfully. (Like they all do. :P)
“Lexie,” he expels on a sigh and your heart jumps, contracts, before beating rapidly because it’s the first time you’ve heard anyone say your name with such unadulterated love.
I really, really loved this line, it just made my heart flutter..LOL.
Re: Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13caerMay 13 2009, 05:13:42 UTC
Whew, so relieved you liked it! I wasn't sure what you were expecting, so I didn't know how this was going to be received. But good to know you enjoyed it =D
I'm actually working on a drabble right now. Heheh.
Re: Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13foibles_fablesMay 12 2009, 01:13:06 UTC
Love it. So so much. I had a similar idea, but I couldn't make anything of it. Trust me, you've just done it so much better than I could have ever hoped to.
That time you’re moving over him slowly, straddling his lap, foreheads pressed, hands joined. He takes in deep breaths, his hooded gaze fixed on you. “Lexie,” he expels on a sigh and your heart jumps, contracts, before beating rapidly because it’s the first time you’ve heard anyone say your name with such unadulterated love.
nyeergghh! Dying here. Such incredible description and completely heartwrenching.
Re: Firsts - Mark/Lexie, PG-13caerMay 13 2009, 05:17:32 UTC
Loved it? Yeah? Wow, thanks! XD
Dude, I was right there with you on not being able to make it work. I sat on this prompt for about a day and a half before finally finding words. You probably would have done just as well (most likely better, though) eventually!
Thanks for your thoughts on this. Appreciate it so very much!! =)
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There are many firsts you experienced before Mark Sloan.
Your first kiss with Andrew McKinney in grade four under the slide on the playground (an innocent peck on the cheek).
Your first real kiss with Scott Holding on your 13th birthday party (also your first boy/girl party). Then your first heartbreak on the same day, when you caught him kissing Jenny Hart.
When you were 16, you brought home your first boyfriend, Mickey Talt, who played saxophone and had the dreamiest eyes in the entire class. A year later when you’re 17, he would use those eyes to get naked with you after the Prom and would become the first boy that got to 4th base ( ... )
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I love this part:
...that Mark has a deathgrip on your hand. He cared enough to show up and that’s when you realize that’s all you need from him.
And i love how you list out their moments and somehow made it more significant by having Lexie pointing it out as a first for something.
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I'm glad that line works for you because I must have it re-written it at least half a dozen times! LOL.
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That time you’re moving over him slowly, straddling his lap, foreheads pressed, hands joined. He takes in deep breaths, his hooded gaze fixed on you. “Lexie,” he expels on a sigh and your heart jumps, contracts, before beating rapidly because it’s the first time you’ve heard anyone say your name with such unadulterated love.
There is so much honesty and it's so incredible heartfelt. I felt just like Lexie while reading this. The sense of almost worshiping (It comes across this way) coming from Mark Sloan basically melts my icy heart. Heee! Love it!
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Anyways, I'm immensely happy you enjoyed it as much as you did! And, four Loves? Wow, that's quite a compliment! Thank you! And I'm also glad you liked the progression; I stressed over how to write this for a day and half so I'm pleased it worked out!
Glad you liked that part =) For some reason, I always equate slow sex with love for Mark in my fics.
Your 'icy heart'? Pfftt, as if you could even have one! Haha, but I'm pretty much beaming right now that your heart melted, nonetheless. I don't think anything I've written has that effect on somebody.
Thank you for all that! Your reviews are always such a pleasure to read =D Which actually makes me feel like a jerk right now, because I have yet to review yours (it's on my list, I swear!). I'll try to get to it sometime this week O_O Really!
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And didn't I tell you I would love this? I love how you showed all of her firsts before Mark and with Mark, it was a wonderful paralell. This came out wonderfully. (Like they all do. :P)
“Lexie,” he expels on a sigh and your heart jumps, contracts, before beating rapidly because it’s the first time you’ve heard anyone say your name with such unadulterated love.
I really, really loved this line, it just made my heart flutter..LOL.
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Lol, not everything comes to wonderfully to me, but like I already told you, I kinda like this one =) And YAY! that you like it too ;)
=D I think that line also makes Lexie's heart flutter ;) Lol.
Soooo happy you enjoyed this! And thank you for such awesome words! =)
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I'm actually working on a drabble right now. Heheh.
Thanks again! =)
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That time you’re moving over him slowly, straddling his lap, foreheads pressed, hands joined. He takes in deep breaths, his hooded gaze fixed on you. “Lexie,” he expels on a sigh and your heart jumps, contracts, before beating rapidly because it’s the first time you’ve heard anyone say your name with such unadulterated love.
nyeergghh! Dying here. Such incredible description and completely heartwrenching.
Wonderful job ;D
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Dude, I was right there with you on not being able to make it work. I sat on this prompt for about a day and a half before finally finding words. You probably would have done just as well (most likely better, though) eventually!
Thanks for your thoughts on this. Appreciate it so very much!! =)
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