I love the idea of a secret everyone knows, how it influences Jesus' actions and his thoughts. This hurts so good. I love that you've addressed what happens during one of his sessions- when Jesus is written about in fics it's alluded to that he has these problems but they're never driven out into the spotlight like you've done here and I really like you haven't sugarcoated it.
Very well done <3
Edited: If you don't shut up, Jesús thinks, I'm going to tell your girlfriend you don't know the words to her songs
I forgot to mention how much that made me laugh. Like, the idea of Jesus throwing major side eye at Pique and being snarky because he can't sleep. Perfect.
thank you so so much for the lovely comment. and I'm glad that what I did worked for you, I wanted to try to address the Jesus's mental health issues head on, and I'm really glad cornerflag exists because I think that this is the perfect place to write genish fic about going through therapy. XD
also I'm glad you enjoyed the humor, too. thank you so so much for the lovely comment!
The opening scene, with Jesus listening to Pique muck up the lyrics to his girlfriend's song and get perfectly coiffed and apply his horrible cologne, is absolutely wonderful <3
I think I picked out most of my favorite lines already, so I'm going to mention some general things this time. We've talked about this before, the "make it funnier" rule. And in this piece particular it's amazing how seamlessly you can do that, drop little jokes and humorous asides and Piques into this subtle, sensitive take on death and anxiety and mental health, without the humor seeming out of place or the topical shift jarring
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Oh this is so very heartbreaking but beautiful all the same. I felt my heart be pulled when he started talking about Antonio. I always wondered how the players really felt and how they coped, are coping. I hope they really do cope with each other, rely on each other. Thank you for this.
thank you so much for the lovely comment! yes, I hope that players who have to deal with so many stressful and difficult things can rely on each other, too.
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Very well done <3
Edited: If you don't shut up, Jesús thinks, I'm going to tell your girlfriend you don't know the words to her songs
I forgot to mention how much that made me laugh. Like, the idea of Jesus throwing major side eye at Pique and being snarky because he can't sleep. Perfect.
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also I'm glad you enjoyed the humor, too. thank you so so much for the lovely comment!
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