Scratch that, changes to the last bit.
Alright, if you have read this last chapter already, you can read what's under the cut.
If you HAVEN'T and are about to, DON'T. Bec and I walked and talked and decided there are too many reveals in such a short span of time (something I honestly thought when writing but couldn't figure out any other way). On our walk we decided how, which means I'm going to add a very long scene that'll split the currently written chapter into two. Yeah, I know it's too long and this is technically editing, but I wrote it yesterday so I'm going to do what I want.
So, after I fix it, instead of doing my usual 3 post thing, I'm just going to post the word count I wrote and the link to the PDF (which I'll then update). After that it'll be business as usual again.
Sadly, this means act 2 won't be done until later this week (but I'm guessing Wed), however this does fix a lot of issues and, I think, make the book better, even if it is in just rough draft state.
Alright? For those curious as to what I'm going to do (and have already read the chapter), feel free to read under the cut.
Benjamin isn't going to be revealed as the traitor until later. The first chapter will start with the Atlas reveal, followed by Ailene's bit with Dratan. Then, they'll discuss who they still think the traitor is in light of recent events. Following that, there will be a scene with Atlas (not spoiling it), that'll do most of the infodumping Ben did regarding Atlas in the current chapter. Following that, they'll be back in their cells, and Benjamin will be revealed (but just in passing) to be the traitor.
The next chapter will start out with them surprised at the revelation (presumably the next day; this also gives us a sense of time regarding Useless coming to save them with Thane), and then Ben will come it. After that, the chapter will remain relatively unchanged, minus a few bits regarding Atlas that will be removed because they'll have been revealed next chapter.
Sorry if you already read it, but it really is for the best. Also, feedback would be GREATLY appreciated on this portion, as it pretty much resolves all the mysteries revolving the mortals plot arcs (while still leaving what is up with the gods unknown), so it needs to be done right.
If you HAVEN'T and are about to, DON'T. Bec and I walked and talked and decided there are too many reveals in such a short span of time (something I honestly thought when writing but couldn't figure out any other way). On our walk we decided how, which means I'm going to add a very long scene that'll split the currently written chapter into two. Yeah, I know it's too long and this is technically editing, but I wrote it yesterday so I'm going to do what I want.
So, after I fix it, instead of doing my usual 3 post thing, I'm just going to post the word count I wrote and the link to the PDF (which I'll then update). After that it'll be business as usual again.
Sadly, this means act 2 won't be done until later this week (but I'm guessing Wed), however this does fix a lot of issues and, I think, make the book better, even if it is in just rough draft state.
Alright? For those curious as to what I'm going to do (and have already read the chapter), feel free to read under the cut.
Benjamin isn't going to be revealed as the traitor until later. The first chapter will start with the Atlas reveal, followed by Ailene's bit with Dratan. Then, they'll discuss who they still think the traitor is in light of recent events. Following that, there will be a scene with Atlas (not spoiling it), that'll do most of the infodumping Ben did regarding Atlas in the current chapter. Following that, they'll be back in their cells, and Benjamin will be revealed (but just in passing) to be the traitor.
The next chapter will start out with them surprised at the revelation (presumably the next day; this also gives us a sense of time regarding Useless coming to save them with Thane), and then Ben will come it. After that, the chapter will remain relatively unchanged, minus a few bits regarding Atlas that will be removed because they'll have been revealed next chapter.
Sorry if you already read it, but it really is for the best. Also, feedback would be GREATLY appreciated on this portion, as it pretty much resolves all the mysteries revolving the mortals plot arcs (while still leaving what is up with the gods unknown), so it needs to be done right.