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Keep Me Close- Chapter XXVI

Jul 24, 2009 21:06

Team: San Jose Sharks
Pairing: Joe Thornton/Evgeni Nabokov
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Not all in San Jose is sunny as the path to the Stanley Cup proves to be as difficult as ever; falling in love might be the simplest task on this year’s agenda.
Editor: sherlockelly! Thank you as always, missy!

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( The titles were stripped away to nothing, because they weren’t important, not now; not in the ideal that this could be so much more, that it could bring so much more than any association could. )

team: san jose sharks, evgeni nabokov, author: revuko, joe thornton, rating: nc-17

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better review later. sherlockelly July 25 2009, 04:20:50 UTC

YAY THEY DID IT!

sorry I've been so busy. Damned kids. :(

Re: better review later. revuko July 25 2009, 04:27:49 UTC

Yes ma'am they did!

It is alright! I blame the children anyways <3

I am anxious to read your review when you find the inspiration :)

capshockeygrl July 25 2009, 04:46:09 UTC

God I love you for updating this story. I mean like woah. <3

Just two things, yes?

“Well no, but, ugh! I just feel bad about it.” Joe admitted with a slight grimace gracing his lips, his fingers tapping the floor with apprehension, caught in between what he wanted to do and what was right. Damn, stupid conscious. “I’m calling him,” he stated with a tone of finality to his voice.

Did you mean conscience?

And this: Deepening the kiss, Joe continued his hand’s menstruations to the shaft as he picked up his thrusting, desperate to find that place where Evgeni would have to realize how perfect they were together.

Please tell me you meant ministrations since menstruations happen to women?

revuko July 25 2009, 05:07:59 UTC

haha that's what I get for writing this with a splitting headache. Thanks for the help!

revuko July 25 2009, 05:11:56 UTC

Ugh that second one is embarrassing, thanks for being one of the first to review so that I could change it before too many people read it :P

sherlockelly July 25 2009, 05:23:36 UTC

yeah... i was pretty beat when i reading it. :(

sorry love

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oohlala July 25 2009, 05:01:45 UTC

THIS BABY IS SO LONG OMG.

revuko July 25 2009, 05:12:24 UTC

Yup! Have you even read it yet?

oohlala July 25 2009, 05:26:07 UTC

FINALLY! i like this even better than christmas sex, it was the day after christmas sex! who doesn't like finding a present that was left unopened?!

oh my bb seto and torr-the whore. someone please get these two a reality show. the whole phone conversation was so believeable! i hope devin doesn't barf everywhere and embarrass himself on the 4th lol.

It was hot, like the furious sun beating on his peeling back, skin boiling with burns that wouldn’t ever heal. It was the state between dream and reality, like listening to the pitter-patter of raindrops, the world gloomy and grey while he was dry and warm inside, curled up ready to fall asleep. It was humbling, like the roars of the crowd when his name was boomed through the loudspeaker, making him feel so small. It was heartstopping, like the last seconds ticking off the clock, a goaltender pulled so one team could force the extra five minutes, either pleading for time to speed up or for it to stop completely ( ... )

revuko July 25 2009, 05:34:38 UTC

My favorite Christmas present is always the last ;)

And those two are the best! I had to include them because they are love for life. I'm glad you liked the phone call! Especially the... *ahem* creative nickname I came up with. Isn't it hilarious?!!?! And I hope he does. Because that would be awesome <3 Oh Devin.

And I am SO glad you like that part! I myself enjoyed writing it, awesome enough. Oh Joe, you loveable sap.

canucksrule1944 July 25 2009, 05:04:29 UTC

:D I really liked this chapter. I'm glad they were able to finally have sex while sober; their relationship is progressing and it's nice :)

revuko July 25 2009, 05:13:58 UTC

Oh yay! Thank you very much! I'm glad they had sober sex too, haha.

Would you like to be updated when new chapters are posted? :)

canucksrule1944 July 25 2009, 05:15:28 UTC

Well I already get email notifications from LJ about fic updates, but if you're going to stop updating in 2M4S then for sure!

revuko July 25 2009, 05:18:18 UTC

Oh you do? That's perfect! Less for me to do then :)
I'm not planning on not updating in 2M4S, but rather keeping the people who aren't emailed with the comm updates such as yourself.

Look at you! Miss smarty pants!

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isuckatlifen July 25 2009, 05:52:40 UTC

This is one of the best stories i have ever read, like seriously. and as far as this chapter goes i wouldn't even dare classify it as smut. It was so eloquent with the swirling emotions and extensive detail i felt i was THERE... which i guess sounds kinda creepy, but it was really really amazingly good.

revuko July 28 2009, 07:29:35 UTC

It's reviews like these that make writing long ass chapters worth it? Yeah, I think so. And not creepy, not at all! It was what I was going for... and in a sense, I guess that is a little creepy. Hmm. Well that's what this comm was made for dammit, so oh well.

And thank you for the kind words :) Hope to see you next chapter! Would you like me to send you a message when the next chapter is up? It seems like 2M4S is updated a lot more than it used to be, which increases the chance of missing pieces, sadly.

isuckatlifen July 28 2009, 21:29:35 UTC

i always check 2mins4slashing so you wont have to send a message because I'm a creeper. lol and i especially look out for your story. and ya no problem what i said was the truth.

revuko August 10 2009, 07:26:35 UTC

HEY CREEPER. Next chapter is up.

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