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Fic: Even Job Got A Break Eventually

Mar 30, 2008 10:29

Title: Even Job Got A Break Eventually
Author: : xlivvielockex
Rating: : PG13
Pairing: Cordelia Chase/Charles Gunn
Prompts: Written for missambs for hetfic_minis who wanted Afterlife, hair, and snark. And wanted no fluff.
Summary: Set after The Thin Dead Line. Cordelia tries to find some kind of meaning and hope.
Word Count: 1,652
Author's Note: A HUGE thanks to my beta, boy_named_susie. I ( Read more... )

pair: ats: cordelia/gunn, char: ats: gunn, tv: ats, fic: standalone, 2008, char: ats: cordelia, promotion, author: kelly, pair: rare, ficathon, rated: pg13

Comments 12

lauratd March 30 2008, 19:05:54 UTC

This is great. Sweet without being gagably so. And it's a nice change to read fanfic that doesn't make Gunn sound like he's Hooked on Ebonics.

xlivvielockex March 30 2008, 19:09:40 UTC

Aww, you are my first comment. You winz the internetz cookiez. (Sorry, had to do the z thing. LOL)

I am a member of a few POC forums and comms. I have learned very quickly that making Gunn into a stereotype does not help anyone. I try really hard to make him sound street without sounding like I da ho, yo! So thank you for the compliment. It means a lot to me, you have no idea.

damnskippytoo March 30 2008, 21:40:16 UTC

Holy fuck I forgot all about it! Why didn't you pinch me??? Shit, shit, shit, shit, fuck. I started it the day I got the assignment and then...fuck!

xlivvielockex March 31 2008, 16:59:03 UTC

Ack! I am sorry. You should have told me I was suppose to pinch you. You know I have no problem with that. :)

damnskippytoo March 31 2008, 17:51:35 UTC

If I'd remembered you were supposed to pinch me I would have remembered to do the fic! ;p

It wasn't your responsibility. I just can't believe how completely it left my mind!

damnskippytoo March 31 2008, 03:01:40 UTC

Okay, hours later and I finished something to post. *whew* It's been a hella busy day. Anyway, now that I have calmed down and read your fic...

Great interaction between our girl and the Gunnster. I love the idea of them sitting in a church just talking about life and what's waiting for them. Nice illusion to Gunn's deal with the devil. Both of them having their own secrets in a house of truth - great irony there. Loved it!

xlivvielockex March 31 2008, 17:00:42 UTC

Sorry about not reminding you again. I was going to say that they seem pretty cool about late entries there but hey, you got something done! That is what matters.

And thank you. I am glad that you got all the little things I tossed in there. I always did enjoy the little bits of Cordelia and Gunn interaction that we got on the show.

dreamincolor March 31 2008, 06:39:15 UTC

First off, I love your icon. :D

You really did a great job with the interaction between the two; the dialgue was great, and the last paragraph summed it all up fantastically.

Very nice.

xlivvielockex March 31 2008, 17:01:44 UTC

Aww, thank you. I didn't make that Gunn icon. Psychofilly at Stranger Things did like forever ago. I just loved it too much not to use it. :)

And thank you. Dialogue is something I seem to struggle with so I am glad that I actually did well in this story. Thanks for the nice comment. :)

ticketsonmyself March 31 2008, 07:58:30 UTC

I really like this. The first few paragraphs are especially strong - when I read them I felt like a small but significant piece of S2 Cordelia clicked into place for me, which is exactly the kind of pleasure I look for in people's writing, but hardly ever get. Cordy's lack of compunction about telling lies in church was very in character, and I like how you preserved a sense of opacity about both of them in each other's eyes, even as they're just starting to look closer. I especially enjoyed these lines:

Suspicion was one of the few colors that she did not wear well.

That couch we put Wes on smelled like bong water and marshmallows. Don’t ask me why marshmallows, maybe stoners just like to eat them when they get high.

This was the last stop on the Cordelia Church Tour, and I was hoping it would be a solo one. No autographs.

Cordy counted off the seconds that he was silent.

His hand felt good against hers, the skin warm and a little rough from too many hard times and not enough good ones.Gunn's worth having faith in! I liked the ( ... )

xlivvielockex March 31 2008, 17:02:59 UTC

Wow, thank you so much for this comment, it was amazing. I am really glad that you liked it so much and that it felt like Cordy. I strive really hard to try to keep my characters, well, in character so this comment is like huge for me. I am really glad that you enjoyed it.