Jansis Fic: Not Running, Not a Whim

[secondmezzanine]

Title: Not Running, Not a Whim
One-shot
Author: secondmezzanine
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: I made it alllllll up, absolutely no truth to it, and no harm or offense intended.

Summary: Jake’s been leading Van on for awhile, but when he finally takes his flirtation a little too far (maybe a lot too far), Van can’t take being turned on and shut down anymore. Lots of

Comments

[qafaddiction]

So much love for this! ♥ ♥ ♥

I should be getting ready for work but instead I'm hanging on every word of this fic and now I want to re-read it because... well, damn.

The whole section about "pretending" - wow. Brilliant. I really felt it.

Your Jake is original; you've written him a little differently than he appears in most RPS, and I like that. He's not Noah, and it shows.

I want to quote so many lines, but I'd be here all day. "This is New York, he wants to shout at them" - HA!! That one made me laugh out loud.

I can't believe this is your first RPF; I hope you consider writing more, because it was fantastic, and I've just joined your fan club. :)

[secondmezzanine]

Wow, thank you so much! I really appreciate your taking the time to write such a nice response. I'm especially glad you liked that Jake was a little different-- I think this idea that I had of him in my mind kind of sparked this fic... the idea that he's a bit more flawed than we might initially assume. :) I'd love to write more for these too. Thanks again!

[rebelchic2788]

very hot
good job on your first van/jake, i just posted my first one too :)

[secondmezzanine]

Thanks so much!

I promise to check yours out too!

[flytalian]

Wow! Great, great story!! Very good job.

Loved this part:
"Luke and Noah style. The phrase runs through his head again. “Pretending,” he repeats. “You mean acting.” He dares to brush his lips under Jake’s ear.
“No,” Jake says, almost indecipherable over the music. He steps back slightly and takes Van’s face in his hands. His eyes search Van’s and he takes a deep breath. His fingers feel rough and hard against Van’s skin and Van suddenly feels a little weak. “No,” Jake repeats. He closes his eyes and leans in, brushing his nose against Van’s cheek. “I mean pretending.”"

[secondmezzanine]

Thank you so much for reading and commenting! It's always great to know what specific parts people respond too. Cheers :)

[aloofly]

That was really, really good! I really loved the confrontation between Jake and Van at the end. ♥ Very well done, especially for a first RPF!

[secondmezzanine]

Thanks so much! Those confrontation scenes are my favorite thing to write. :) And by the way, your icon makes me squee... a lot!

[j525]

Awwwwww. That was sweet. I loved this. I'm sure I could say more but I just really enjoyed this. Good way to start my day :)

[secondmezzanine]

Aw, thanks so much! I'm so glad it gave you a nice start to the day. :)