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valhalla37

Slow death in the badlands

Apr 22, 2010 14:16

Title: Slow death in the badlands
Characters/Pairings: Miles; Kate, Sawyer, Hurley, Jack, others.
Rating: R, for violence.
Summary: In the aftermath of The Incident, something goes very, very wrong.
Word Count: 4,059
Spoilers/Warnings: Up to beginning of S6/lots of character death, language, some gore and, oh right, zombies. It’s clearly not a ( Read more... )

character: sawyer, character: miles, character: jack, character: kate, character: hurley

Comments 14

primarycolors92 April 22 2010, 18:36:11 UTC

Oh, you INCREDIBLE GENIUS, you <3

You do realize you'll have to marry me now?

I'll be back later with a much, much longer comment BUT OMFG I LOVE THIS SO MUCH IT IS PERFECTPERFECTPERFECT!

Thank you so much *glomps*

(Ha! Hahaha. Jack got eaten first. Hee!)

primarycolors92 April 22 2010, 23:43:21 UTC

he doesn’t even have the energy to wonder if 2007 means even tinier cellphones or whether his douche of a landlord’s sold off all his stuff or if anyone’s even wondered when he went

Oh, hello, incredibly IC Miles voice, how are you? Seriously, a PERFECT Miles voice.

And then when Miles hears the dead voices and it's CHARLIE, and poor, beautiful Alex, and Mr. Eko- fabulous details.

And then James gets to smack down Radzinsky, which is awesome b/c he was a huge douchebag (who shot himself, which, missing skull!).

get swallowed into the jungle’s darkness, eaten whole by the shadows.
Awesome. Just awesome.

Jack, who is still a take-charge kinda guy, gets eaten first, which is kinda awesome and hilarious, while still being very scary and sad. And poor BAMF Kate, shooting him. I love it. And Shannon, that Sayid lives to see her like this then dies is tragic. Almost as tragic as losing Jin.

He can’t say he’s completely sorry as a bullet shatters Dan’s skull.

Oh, ouch but perfectly sharp for the tone of the story ( ... )

valhalla37 May 5 2010, 15:21:50 UTC

*drops dead*

I seriously, seriously, seriously don't even know how to respond to this feedback it's so amazing -- I'm intimidated by this feedback, because it's so incredible and wonderful and a dream come true to any writer ( ... )

valhalla37 May 5 2010, 15:14:15 UTC

(Ugh, I am SO late getting here to respond to this I'm embarrassed -- I'm sorry!)

LOL, you're amazing for being so kind! I was so excited to see that I'd gotten you for a recipient again, and especially that you'd included that drabble as an option, since you know how much I loved it.

(Heehee, the irony was too delicious to pass up -- pun! ;P)

tia_no_one April 23 2010, 00:26:11 UTC

Holy crap. Wow. This was incredible.

valhalla37 May 5 2010, 15:22:22 UTC

Wow, thank you so, SO much; that's so incredibly appreciated! :D

(And apologies for the late reply!)

elliotsmelliot April 23 2010, 16:48:31 UTC

Oh my god!

This was horrifying and yet so poignant. I loved how you showed this from Miles's POV. You have an incredible sense for his voice and his connections with the freighter and Dharma folk. What a tragedy. You are an evil genuius.

It will take me a while to shake this.

valhalla37 May 5 2010, 16:44:46 UTC

Wow, thank you SO much!

This is so outside anything else I've ever written -- in terms of style and the violence and the lack of Daniel/Charlotte -- but I had such a great time doing it, and it didn't hurt that I adored the original drabble, which was the perfect set-up for this weird business. ;D Even if Miles hadn't been the protagonist in the original work, I still think his POV would be one of the coolest to explore a scenario like this.

You are an evil genius

I take that as the highest compliment. ;P Thank you, again, for leaving such incredible feedback on something I was absolutely scared to post -- really made my day!

franza April 23 2010, 21:21:32 UTC

There is no emoticon to demonstrate the contorted expression on my face. This...omg...this was fantastic. So horrific, I've never been frightened by anything in fiction writing before, but this was just chilling.
You have such amazing talent! Jeezuz, I don't think i'll be able to sleep tonight!!
Loved how you used Miles POV as well.

valhalla37 May 5 2010, 16:53:31 UTC

Oh wow, thank you so much! That's seriously the best kind of compliment you could give, especially since I'm such a fan of horror-type stories but have never tried them before myself.

So thank you again! I'm seriously blushing right now! :D

ozmissage April 26 2010, 21:39:47 UTC

The best horror gets under your skin and won't let you go no matter how much you want to look away. It kind of propels you forward into the darkness and you go with it because you can't fathom the idea of going back ( ... )

valhalla37 May 5 2010, 16:57:39 UTC

*picks jaw up off floor*

WOW. Thank you so, so much; I am seriously getting spoiled with feedback on this fic; you're too kind!

I'm so glad you like the choice of Miles as sort of the protagonist here, since I thought it would be a neat twist that he's the only one with the whole other connection to the dead people, but that still doesn't change the reality of what he's faced with.

I wish I could have done more with the scene with Juliet. I knew what I wanted the outcome to be -- James to go out there and never come back -- but actually writing it just ... icked me out too much. But I'm happy to hear you thought it worked anyway. :D And Kate! Like I said to someone else, she wasn't supposed to play a major role in this, but nobody else was badass enough to carry it off. ;P

You know I love everything you write, but I think this might be my new favorite story from you.

Wow ... seriously, wow. Again, I'm so, so flattered -- thanks so much! :D