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tracerj

Thirteen Ribbons: Like Old Times

Jul 16, 2009 11:54

LIKE OLD TIMES ( Read more... )

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docwebster July 16 2009, 19:53:02 UTC

Pretty good stuff, o Keet.

tracerj July 16 2009, 19:55:35 UTC

Thanks! I've really enjoyed writing this so far.

sythyry July 17 2009, 00:32:52 UTC

I'm enjoying it, but I'm getting a bit confused with what name goes with what species goes with what anything else.

tracerj July 17 2009, 01:21:52 UTC

I've tried to make sure that such can at least be inferred from the patterns of dialogue, but... well, hopefully it'll clear up when the characters are better-established.

Perhaps I should have a running list of characters with relevant info as it's revealed?

sythyry July 17 2009, 02:55:39 UTC

You are much more familiar with your characters than we are! I'd recommend giving at least some basic clues. here is how I do it, which may be more than you need if you're not going as berserk as I do with Sythyry.

tracerj July 17 2009, 03:15:29 UTC

Not a bad idea at all! My columns would differ: name, apparent gender and species, claimed homeworld, primary occupation. (Why the 'apparent' part? Well, people can and do change there....)

Also, you might want to take a look at that table of yours. The blank cells appear to be collapsing down so that the cells to the right of them are off by a column. Usually, a fixes that....

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tracerj July 17 2009, 01:25:00 UTC

Understandable; it's an common as gender-indeterminate pronouns go, but it's uncommon to hear them except in places where it's going to come up often like this. Here's hoping that perhaps you grow a little more accustomed to it?

The funny thing is.. the setting on which this one is based has a hell of a lot more odd pronoun usage than these stories will. I settled on just one set. *grin*

Anyhow, thanks for reading so far! More to come....

ladyperegrine July 17 2009, 01:32:32 UTC

The shifts in perspective are confusing me a bit, but I still like them (and the story) so far.

tracerj July 17 2009, 01:36:23 UTC

Ah. That's an old conceit of mine. I love presenting each part of a long story as narrated by the person who I feel most ties it together as the observer. I'm about to do it again....

cobaltie July 17 2009, 21:47:21 UTC

You're putting these out remarkably fast, really. I was inspired by your first one to write something similar, but I still haven't finished editing and refining it. You've put out what, four or five now, shorter for sure, but still mini-stories in their own right. Awesome!

More like...chapters or segments in a longer story, it feels like now, rather than simply vignettes. Scenes. <3