Breaking the Rules - a Christiana and Claire flashback

[the_mctavishams]

This is a small piece I wrote as part of the Scavenger Hunt prize-pack. It's been something I've had in the back of my mind ever since I posted the 10 Things About Christiana and Val (found here); in that post, I'd mentioned that even having been raised on ocean-front property, deep water makes her nervous. eshuff picked up on that and asked me about it

Comments

[gfitz]

Every time I read your work I am moved beyond words. This was amazing. Incredible.

[the_mctavishams]

<3333 thank you. Every time I reread this comment I get a huge smile on my face. Thank you so much :)

[anonymous]

Wow, That provides so much insight not only into Christie, but Bradean as well.

[the_mctavishams]

:) I'm glad you think so! I thought so too. Thank you!

[open_the_blinds]

Some of the best advice I every got (other than the "water-glass" approach to plotting a story) is "don't tell the reader something, show them." And you have got that hands down; this line, "Beneath them, the waves of the Trianic Sea lapped peacefully on the shore, lulling them both to sleep; whispering little-girl dreams of mermaids and princes and promises," is beautiful (and my favorite); it really paints a picture.

As always, a FAB job done. :D

[the_mctavishams]

Thank you!! :) I really appreciate that. ^_^ (That's one of my favorite lines, too!)