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Highway Cloudbusting -- Part 9 (9/11)

Mar 20, 2010 18:45

Title: Highway Cloudbusting -- Part 9 (9/11)
Series: Axis Powers Hetalia
Characters: England, USA, mentions of other nations, unnamed American citizens
Pairing: Eventual England/USA
Rating: PG-13 for this chapter (but fic is NC-17 overall)
Warning: Possible cliches and predictability. Also deals with issues of sexuality and coming out, and ( Read more... )

series: axis powers hetalia, chapterfic: highway cloudbusting, pairing: england/america

Comments 82

mayhemagenta March 21 2010, 02:12:24 UTC

hgkjshdhsdkhhs I just got back from a 3 hour drive from my grandparents place and I AM GREETED WITH THIS ;DDD I can't tell you how happy I am that you've updated! Firstly, I've gotta tell you that something went wrong-ish with your coding towards the end, 'cause the last few paragraphs are in italics. Just to let you know ( ... )

stardropdream March 21 2010, 02:17:07 UTC

Oops, thanks for pointing out the mistake! Of course the one time I don't double-check the coding before crossposting is the one time that I mess it up. *ninjas onto the scene and fixes it!*

I feel so awful about leaving it off on such a cliffhanger, but I couldn't find a good place to leave it (it was already 9,300 words...) so I decided that if I had to leave it off abruptly I might as well do it in the meanest most dramatic fashion possible... But I'm already working hard on chapter ten, so hopefully it can get up soon!

I'm so glad you like the story, and the characterizations. I worry over it, especially with this chapter.

Thanks so much for reading!

subakai March 21 2010, 02:24:39 UTC

GAHHH! NO!!! WHY SUCH A CLIFFHANER?! They're finally getting somewhere!

I believe I enjoyed England punching America a bit too much. Haha, and am trying to figure out about where in Cali they are. I should know my state.

stardropdream March 21 2010, 06:01:29 UTC

I'm so sorry for such an abrupt ending! Like I said above, the chapter was already getting to be 9,300 words and I had to end it and there was no way to end it that wouldn't put it on some kind of cliffhanger. So I decided to be a jerk and put it on a mega-cliffhanger (might as well go all out, it's the American way!!!), but I'm already working hard on the tenth chapter, so hopefully the wait won't be too long. ♥

I'm glad you enjoyed England getting his inner empire on.

As for... the place they are. My understanding of Californian geography is dismal at best so I kept it purposefully vague to prevent from doing blatant errors in landscape. At the very least they haven't reached the bay area yet.

Thanks for reading!

subakai March 23 2010, 02:21:25 UTC

If they haven't reached the bay yet, then there really isn't a wasteland until you get halfway through the Valley and into Death Valley. North to middle is pretty woody and green. Lately though, I'm not really sure (because of the drought and smelt controversy).

stardropdream March 23 2010, 06:26:28 UTC

Oh, I know that, at least. derp. I didn't mean to use wasteland to suggest a desert, but more like just a deserted area. There're a lot of parts that are woody but it's also to my understanding that there are long stretches of just grass? I could be wrong it's... been a long time since I've been to California, lol. |Da

twistedsheets10 March 21 2010, 02:24:40 UTC

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

*faints*

OH YOU BOYS. You stupid silly LOVELY BOYS what do you do to my heart Pffft ♥♥♥

*laughs so loud*

I love the last part so much. RUNNING AWAY! Oh Iggy, oh America! I've been waiting for AGES for this scene, and it is perfect! America saying he can run faster, and and...

“You stay the fuck away from me,” England commanded, his voice deadly quiet.OH YEAH BABY. British Empire IN YOUR FACE, BIATCH. Would you believe I cheered at this line, wth self ( ... )

twistedsheets10 March 21 2010, 02:27:04 UTC

Also:

“I can do whatever the hell I want,” England shouted, walking quicker still. “We haven’t talked in days-months-! We don’t talk, America-we don’t communicate!”

THIS. JUST. THIS.

And er:

“That’s all I am to you, huh? STUPID?” America shouted, face contorted in rage.

“Yes!” America shouted. “You’re stupid-you’re blind-you don’t realize just what you-just what it is that you do-You can’t be honest with yourself ‘about this’? Can’t be honest about what?”

Shouldn't that be "England shouted?"

stardropdream March 21 2010, 06:02:10 UTC

D'oh, what an obvious error. Thanks for pointing it out. ♥ /fixes that up OTL

stardropdream March 21 2010, 06:06:12 UTC

/catches and fans -_-b ( ... )

lovelylurker March 21 2010, 02:25:41 UTC

Yeeeeeees!

I've been waiting for this all freaking day.

OH SHIT OH SHIT

PLEASE TELL ME HE SAYS IT

PLEAAAAAAAAASEE

RAAARRRGGGHHHHHHHH *slams fist*

Also this chapter is like deja vu of the chapter before the whole "night that shall not be mentioned."

stardropdream March 21 2010, 06:06:57 UTC

I'm glad you saw the similarities from past chapters. Drawing back on things is a lot of fun - especially when people recognize it, even if it's been a few weeks since we've seen the earlier chapters.

Thanks for reading. I'll try and get the next chapter up soon!

0phiomancer March 21 2010, 02:43:54 UTC

So, I made this really embarrassing squeaking noise when I saw this at the top of my F-List. Luckily, no one heard it but my cats <.< >.>

The cliffhanger may just kill me, but oh what a way to go! But seriously, I ♥ this fic so much. Despite whatever difficulties you had writing it, I think that the end result is definitely up to your usual (amazing) standard.

I loved how pissed off England got in this chapter, not only because it had been a long time coming, but because I've always pictured him as having a nasty temper that influences him to do batshit things in the heat of the moment. Like almost wreck a car, and then go stomping off into the desert empty-handed.

Now I wonder if, once America makes his confession (assuming he actually does), England will even be honest in return right away, or if he'll stew in his own pride for a bit first. Because nothing can ever be straightforward with these two.

stardropdream March 21 2010, 06:12:33 UTC

Embarrassing squeaking noises aside (and boy, have I made my fair share of those...), I'm glad you were that happy to see an update. It really makes me so happy to know that so many people like this story... I'll say that forever orz (and be so sad when it comes to an end ( ... )