[01/06] Yakuza AU: Bullet

[soucieux]

title. Bullet
pairing. akame (je)
rating. r
summary. akanishi and kamenashi are yakuza who work together, who live together, who trust each other. they have rows of dark suits in their respective closets (and skeletons behind those). kame is kind of fucked up and more than a little self-centered.
author’s note. i wrote this in july for a certain ohfetus

Comments

[lonelybusiness]

The image of Jin almost crashing into a dump truck is love. I like the way you write your sentences, all clipped and abrupt but still retaining that vulnerability at the end.

...this is a weird comment.

[soucieux]

thank you!! ♥ it's a style i've gotten very comfortable with, so maybe i should work on changing things up so i don't seem boring.

[lonelybusiness]

Your writing style is galaxies away from boring, are you kidding me?!?! You don't bludgeon the reader with over-the-top angst and that is a GOOD THING.

Also, I've just reread this fic and realized that Jin almost runs into a eighteen-wheeler and not a dump truck. That'll teach me not to comment on anything during a caffeine crash.

[soucieux]

haha, thank you! though i'm told i should indulge in some fluff every now and then. 8D;

dump truck, eighteen wheeler--either one will freak kame out. :) thank you!♥

[gingifere]

Mmmmm Yakuza!Akame. Yum. I like the way you didn't give us too much such as who they were working for, what the missions was, why they ended upliving together etc. It worked really well. As usual perfect! :D

[soucieux]

it allows you to focus more on their relationship and the characterization. i don't know if that's a good or bad thing, because when i think about it that way, i didn't really need to make them YAKUZA..

...but it's more fun, right? 8D

[soucieux]

this time i told you it was old ):

i try my best to please!!!

[rei_an]

uwa!!! oh my god :0 I love it, likes a lot lot lot.
Thank you so much. XD

[soucieux]

and thank you for this comment! :D

[abstraque]

I love the last line. ♥!

[soucieux]

thank you!