Chapter 10

[simtopi]

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10: Out of Place

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[robertcarney]

loved this installment!
congrats on 10 ch too ;p

when clara came down the stairs i had an "oh no she didnt!" moment and my jaw dropped.
she's a very evil witch, that clara. ha

can't wait for the next chapter!

[simtopi]

Thank you! And yes Clara is ridiculously evil, lol. (and it's always nice to see new commenters :D )

[leapsbarnes]

WHY would you want shorter chapters? I'm totally obsessed. lol. I always get to the end and am like "eeep! Not enough!" Poor Morrison! She killed their pet! You can't kill pets! That like, goes against the rules! I mean, I guess it doesn't, but it's still sad :( lol. I'm not going to lie, this was a great chapter :) Awesome job! Sorry my comment sucks, I just got off an eight and a half hour shift, so I'm exhausted. :(

[simtopi]

Why would I want shorter chapters? Well, I'm always (maybe overly) conscious of boring readers with too much pictures or too much text, or even slowing down their browser. I've actually editted out a lot of this chapter. I left a big chunk out, which will now go into the next chapter.

And yes Clara killed the dog! She's an atrociously evil witch, that's what they do, lol.

[leapsbarnes]

Yea, I can understand the slowing down their browser, but I highly doubt you are boring any readers. :) I promise. Then again, who am I to talk? With the Shadows I was always like "I need to get it shorter, I need to get it shorter!!" and I don't know where that compulsion came from really. lol.

[dicaprioangel]

I liked this chapter! I love to see lots of screencaps, so you don't have to worry about going overboard :-) The longer, the better :-) I'm definitely looking forward to the next one!

Poor Morrison! I liked him! Damn that evil witch for killing him >:-( Boo to her! lol

[simtopi]

I don't mind long chapters in some of my favourite stories if they are balanced well with the text. That's what I'm trying to do at least so like I said to

[momijichan8893]

Don't make shorter chapters! I love your story, its the only sim story I've ever read that I actually enjoy all aspects of the story, not just some or most. I agree with dicaprioangel, the longer the chapter, the better!

[simtopi]

If I make the chapters longer, I'll have nothing to write about in the next one. ;) I'm really glad you like the story that much. ^_^

[pennysims]

How I love your writing style. This was such a great update! And lots of Jasmine = WIN

Once again you pictures are phenomenal. I especially love this one but then again I LOVE them all.

[simtopi]

Thanks Penny. :) That picture was so lucky. It was raining when I posed him, and all I had to do was wait a bit for the lightning. It didn't actually strike the tree outside, which you'd think that lightning would do, it struck a garden light, lol.