Chapter 4

[simtopi]

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4: The Invitation

Comments

[dark_dwellersim]

I finally read this more thouroughly, and WOW! Willow seems really insecure, so timid. :) It's a great personality for her.

I can't wait to see what happens next with the concert.

[valpre]

I love your use of flashbacks, it flows so smoothly I don't feel the transitions sometimes until I'm entangled with the present and the past.

High school kids can be pretty mean sometimes, and poor Willow seems to have gotten the worst of it :(

That last scene with Ms. Cordial was a little tense and unsettling, and just a bit overly protective!

I agree with Ning, that last shot made my heart sore. I can just imagine the horror those girls out her through at the party :(

[greygoldgriffin]

Hi, sorry I'm necro-commenting but I've just started reading your story and I'm really loving it.

I just wanted to say how much Wren and Raven remind me of Edgar and Alan Frog from The Lost Boys film, no idea if this is intentional or not. But I love it! I'll go back to reading now and try not to comment until I'm up to date :)

[simtopi]

Ooh, I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. :) Definitely take your time with it and I'd love to know what you think. :D

Wren and Raven are absolutely my tribute to the Frog Brothers from Lost Boys. I'm glad you noticed! :D

[greygoldgriffin]

I'm finding it really gripping! I love how the different character stories mesh seemlessly together. And your characterisation is very well thought out.

From their first appearance, I was pretty convinced that it was the Frog Brothers. An awesome tribute, and in fact I love the slightly edgier, 21st century slant you've given them, all whilst remaining totally true to the essence of the Lost Boys characters.

:D