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Story: "For Whom the Pants Toll"

Apr 30, 2005 06:10

First time posting here - though I read regularly. I put this up on my personal LJ and then decided to throw it up here too in a sudden and inexplicable rush of bravery. So hi all ( Read more... )

fiction: sullensiren

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aralias April 30 2005, 06:35:46 UTC

*smiles happily*

wonderful. the songs, and pass the catsup (paticuarly peter's completely bewildered version) and the dumbledore/mcgonnagal story... i'm glad that one didn't make the finished cut: i fear scarring would definately be in order.

lorax April 30 2005, 19:10:33 UTC

Thanks! The songs I wasn't sure about and fussed at them a lot. I had two more that didn't make the cut 'cause they weren't funny. Heh. And yes - deeply scarring! :)

jemariel May 1 2005, 17:46:15 UTC

::butts in a moment:: Something to remember about humor (I spent my entire year-long theater internship this year on comedy, so tis fresh in my mind) is the rule of three - do something twice, it feels unfinished. Do it four times, it's overdone. Three times, especially when the third packs a certain punch, (i.e. the Lupin-outing) and it's comedic gold 9 times out of 10. And always good to have backup bits, but if something's not funny, you chop it. So, you hit the nail on the head there. ^_^

::butts back out::

lorax May 1 2005, 18:35:07 UTC

Heh - probably sound advice. The additional two were only half-in. One was heard as Remus was leaving and one was being sung by James and Peter when they came in, but I couldn't get them to work, so maybe it was the rule of comedy at work without my realizing it!

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lorax April 30 2005, 19:11:13 UTC

lol. Sadly there's a redhead who got in there before you. ;)

Thank you - I'm glad you liked it!

therealw April 30 2005, 07:50:21 UTC

"His name was on the Poof Monthly newsletter."
That line's an instant classic. Heh.

Lovely. I had a great time reading this story. Thank you :)

lorax April 30 2005, 19:13:11 UTC

Hee! Arrogant as it is, that was one of my favorite lines. I'm glad someone else liked it!

Thanks!

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lorax April 30 2005, 19:13:34 UTC

Thank you! Glad you liked it.

balefully April 30 2005, 08:17:13 UTC

A disinclination to do as you so charmingly ordered me to do

Is he disclined to acquiesce to his request? ;)!

"I'd take your pumpkin nose for you, Moony."

That is such an adorably Sirius thing to say.

Loved this, short and sweet and just what I needed for a break from my revision. Lupin on top, indeed. :D!

balefully April 30 2005, 08:17:54 UTC

Disinclined. I can SPELL!

lorax April 30 2005, 19:15:12 UTC

lol. You know when i was editing I *looked* at that line, wondering if I should change it because it sounded Pirates-esque, but in the end I left it because the Pirates-inspiring train of thought it brought was kinda funny anyway. :)

Heh, thanks for reading, glad you liked it. Luck with your revision! And don't worry about the spelling. ;) You got acquiesce right, which I always have to look up!