Manip - Blackout Poems

[nmcil12]

The script I worked from is Beneath You - one of my all time favorite episodes of the entire series and one of the finest performances of James Marsters and Sarah Michell Gellar.  Hope you like the poems I came up with - I plan on doing others.   I did not have the time to do the third one - I wanted to do the final "can we rest now" section - no

Comments

[thenewbuzwuzz]

Hey, yours has rhythm! :D Almost clean, too. Well done! It's frustrating that in this form, you can't just choose any different word with the same meaning to adjust.
It's interesting how "no touching" reads together with the rest. If I try and forget the scene, the first line could be read as 'no real (emotional) intimacy'. And then when I look at the rest of the lines, hello, Spuffy blues...
See, you did do something I wouldn't have. I gave up on using notable Spuffy scenes early on, because for me it's then too difficult to forget the original meanings and free up new ones. But you've braved this scene and managed to add something to it. Yay!
Yeah, shooting scripts aren't the final versions. :/ I picked them because the language is more deliberate than in transcripts and all the words (not only the dialogue) belong to Buffy creators, so in that way they're more official.

[nmcil12]

I tried to convey the scene more from Spike's perspective. Now that he has this fought for and won soul - the reality of what he mostly was to her - an object of sin, desire, punishment and temporary escape has all come down to this destruction of self identity. It's interesting how his emotional melt down during the AR from their abusive relationship makes him objectify Buffy just as she did Spike. Here he is now re-processing it all with his guilt, soul and searching for mercy and forgiveness not with sex or a state but on the punishing cross.

[thenewbuzwuzz]

Ohh. I see it now.

[freecat15]

Oh, I love what you did there!
It's interesting that, if you can detach yourself from that scene (which you enriched by leaving out, go figure!), it could almost be read as happening in s6 from Buffy's POV.
Love it!

[double_dutchess]

Way to capture the essence of S6!