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Fic: Fin Amour (4/6)

Jul 01, 2010 00:07

Title: Fin Amour
Author: angearia
Summary: The monks’ spell to create the Key goes wonky.
Timeline: Season 5 AU
Rating: R for (highlight to view) language, graphic violence and character death.
Word Count: ~14,000

Author’s Note: The beginning dialogue in the prologue is lifted from the BtVS episode No Place Like Home and one line borrowed from Spiral-all ( Read more... )

genre: baby/kid/parent fic, form: fic, era: btvs s5, rating: other, creator: angearia

Comments 12

petzipellepingo July 1 2010, 13:14:02 UTC

You've really captured everyone's voices beautifully in this, especially Buffy.

Joyce squeezes Buffy’s hand. “You have to go, sweetheart. There’s a better chance for everyone if you go.”

“Mom, no…”

Joyce smiles and squeezes her hand again.

“So,” Spike says, breaking the silence, “When do we leave?”

And now the two of them are off.

angearia July 1 2010, 14:26:27 UTC

Thanks so much! I'm glad the voices ring true.

And now the two of them are off.

Simply had to get those two crazy kids alone together, now didn't I?

Your every icon is supremely appropriate with every comment you leave--I'm in awe. ♥

petzipellepingo July 1 2010, 22:41:11 UTC

I have a disgraceful number of them.

moscow_watcher July 1 2010, 15:31:42 UTC

Brilliant chapter. I envy people who can write action - it's one of the things I completely suck at. Your action scenes are vivid and visceral, they place the reader in the middle of the scene. I adore how you intersperce the action with occasional line from the canonical version. "Don't hit the horsies" - I'm sure that Willow would have said it in any reality! :)

angearia July 1 2010, 15:37:00 UTC

Thank you so much. I can't say if I've ever deconstructed how I write action scenes, but I'm certainly glad they read well. I can say that I have a very vivid imagination about these sorts of things and that growing up, I was just as likely to watch Bruce Willis blowing up buildings and Jean-Claude Van Damme unleashing martial arts as I was to watch Disney movies and chick flicks. So action and fight scenes are pure pleasure to visualize. As for writing, I think it's just about staying as close to the character as you can--what they see, what they feel, what they do.

Hee! Willow would definitely say that line in any reality. DeKnight had some great one liners in this ep. I think Spiral is a bit underappreciated--I think it's great fun.

brutti_ma_buoni July 1 2010, 20:38:16 UTC

Ohhhh, boy. Great reworking of the Winnebago/knights fight to suit your twisted version. Losing Buffy to labour instead of catatonia... ouch. Can't wait to read more, so I'm going to stop commenting and read on!

angearia July 1 2010, 20:44:06 UTC

Thanks! I really appreciate hearing your thoughts as you go. :)

cafedemonde July 2 2010, 11:51:17 UTC

*sniffs*

angearia July 2 2010, 14:16:47 UTC

:*(

snickfic July 7 2010, 22:50:56 UTC

Ahhhhh! *flaily hands*

Not a lot of comment here, except that that's pretty much the same reaction I had to the original "Spiral," so you must be doing something right. *g*

angearia July 8 2010, 02:35:16 UTC

Yay! *does flaily hands* You know, I loved Spiral, too--I think it's a bit underrated. I always enjoy it.

snickfic July 8 2010, 02:53:18 UTC

I think it's underrated, too. It's all actiony! It's way more action-movie than just about anything else in the series, plus I always enjoy when the show gets off the set, out of the lot, and into the real world. It feels so much more genuine. Plus, oh, suspense! And great scenes with Spike - "something heroic" and how he's kind to Tara when she burns him, not to mention the scene where Xander lights his cigarette.

I mean, what's not to love?