Your prologue is wonderful. I love that it’s from Chad’s POV and I love this part even more (what a summarization!):
It’s a bit romanticized. Yeah, okay, it’s a lot romanticized. Jared, if he weren’t in the story, would have laughed at Chad. But Chad thinks that won’t happen now. And Jensen? He’d call Chad a sap, before surreptitiously wiping away a tear. So it’ll never be happily ever after.I also really like Jared right off the bat, mostly, I think, because Jared seems to think outside the box (like not letting the bouncer throw Jensen out of the bar, and it was a ridiculous and old-fashioned rule to be quiet in libraries, and for real, why shouldn’t you be allowed to chimpsit in your own apartment?). I don’t blame him for taking Jensen home with him, dealing with young kids, it’s something that he recognizing in Jensen
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Hey you! I need to savor your comments slowly, like fine wine. You so get me and my writing :) Thanks for liking Jared's out of the box thinking. That was the idea. More on that later when you see the plot develop.
The robot is a child. A very beautiful child.
And thanks for finding the funny. I always think I lack in that department -- I'm thrilled to have made you smile.
Hi Sandy...I'm intrigued *waggles eyebrows* jRobot is fascinating, he's not supposed to be programmed for feelings but seems to me that that may be his error. Him being naked when the fire men came and telling Jared how fast he'd have to flick the towel, very funny ;)I made sure to download the jRobot mix as well, of course. Thank nightrider101 and sillie82 for me, What a great job on the art thus far.
Thanks! I'm excited that you've started this one. It's one of my personal faves. The music mix is also wonderful. She did a great job. And the art -- is pure love.
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Ahh my break is over! and I want to keep reading your story, I'm already hooked
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It’s a bit romanticized. Yeah, okay, it’s a lot romanticized. Jared, if he weren’t in the story, would have laughed at Chad. But Chad thinks that won’t happen now. And Jensen? He’d call Chad a sap, before surreptitiously wiping away a tear. So it’ll never be happily ever after.I also really like Jared right off the bat, mostly, I think, because Jared seems to think outside the box (like not letting the bouncer throw Jensen out of the bar, and it was a ridiculous and old-fashioned rule to be quiet in libraries, and for real, why shouldn’t you be allowed to chimpsit in your own apartment?). I don’t blame him for taking Jensen home with him, dealing with young kids, it’s something that he recognizing in Jensen ( ... )
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The robot is a child. A very beautiful child.
And thanks for finding the funny. I always think I lack in that department -- I'm thrilled to have made you smile.
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